Midnight Twilight, Prelude To Fright
hold back those tears of fear,they'll do you no good tonight
bar the windows, bar the doors
light the candles, hang the charms
do not scream, for it will only hasten the night
ripping through the security of the achiever,
tearing through the nerves of the fearful,
shredding the smugness of the the disbeliever,
battering even the griever
I am one, I am many
I am physical, I am specter
I am man, I am monster
I'm your own worst nightmare...
...and i will always be waiting in the dark....
....until that night you let your guard down.
Author notes
wrote this in a lecture and then finished it on the way home so not sure what i think about it, opinions would be greatly appreciated
Whatever
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poor boy ....
deserves 5 stars
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Very clever lad,
impending doom...
I did a quick check of the doors
after reading.
Peace,
Lowell -
A great start for a new genre. You did a wonderful job on this. The only thing that got to me was your rhyming scheme. You rhymed some of it, but not all of it. It would flow better if you stuck with one or the other. Just a thought. Great work, though!
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Nicely done! I am working with my pscyhology major and this hit the spot! Fantastic job with description and detail!
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I agree with the "creepy" comment! LoL But I think that this was well written and it hit home.
I am one, I am many
I am physical, I am specter
I am man, I am monster
I'm your own worst nightmare...
^^Loved this stanza.
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Scary
Scary scary stuff, Well written and rather creepy. A great combo in my world. Well done. It captured my attentiondrom word one. Alot conveyed in a few words. Loved it!!
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Really made me think
Great poem it really got me thinking. Good word choice, amazing voice and emotion.
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it makes me what to stand up to you.
maybe punch you for talking to me like that. lol
no good poem though, your goal was reached.
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i like it, very spooky and i love the last two lines
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