It was Christmas morning I think I was eight.
Hook, line, and sinker I swallowed the bait.
I woke up early and snuck out to see,
what Santa had left for us under the tree.
I got quite a shock as I looked all around.
No presents at all, none to be found!
In shocking disbelief, could this really be true?
So much for that bike, and my GI Joe too.
I ran to my room with tears of despair.
How could this happen? Life is not fair!
I woke up my sisters and rightly complained.
Santa had skipped us I sadly explained.
It must be their fault. It couldn't be me.
For I was the “angel" of the family you see.
I took them to show just what they had done,
but it turned out ‘ole Santa was just having fun.
For inside our stockings, a hand-written note.
"Your first gift is in a place you might float."
The bathtub, I thought, racing down the hall,
Where I found a new glove, a bat, and a ball.
With each gift a clue where the next would be.
The last one then took us all back to the tree.
The final one Santa had tagged and signed,
“The meaning of Christmas inside you will find.”
It was a beautiful cross, we knew what it meant.
A sign we would carry wherever we went.
We knew in our hearts, God’s message was true.
But it felt good to know that Santa knew too.
It wasn’t about what we thought we had missed.
Santa reminded us with one little twist.
The true gift this day is not opened then done,
but one that will last, God’s gift of His Son!
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A contest entry
- Winter/Christmas memories by HeavensNewestAngel.
550 points, ended December 1, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Christmas Tales I've Known and Loved by faithwhisperer.
1250 points, ended December 14, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Christmas Spirits ~~ PW Open~~ by misticmoonlite.
700 points, ended December 7, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Looking for Christmas! by Kappa Pyua.
400 points, ended December 18, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - #167 Your Favorite Christmas memory by daviscth.
625 points, ended December 9, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Christmas rhymes by XIII Loves.
600 points, ended January 5, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - HOLLY JOLLY CHRISTMAS by dragonscales.
1050 points, ended December 25, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - #34 THEME CONTEST (: by Walk-Free.
500 points, ended December 25, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - THE CHRISTMAS SPIRIT by WesBreezyxxx.
400 points, ended December 31, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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I love the twist in this story poem.
It was fun to read.
Well written!
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cute and great poem. i like the rhymes. clues are fun. =) wow congratulations on scooping up all cups of 4 different colors. well done.
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Lovely
That's a really lovely memory to have.
We used to set treasure trails for our children at Easter, they used to complain all the way as they wanted to get to that chocolate... as they got older, we did the clues in code, and French, and morse... then one year we thought they were too old, and they got all upset!!
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my Mom is so cool... sounds like your kids have something to brag about as well - Kevin
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love it
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thanks
this is an irreplaceable Christmas memory - Kevin
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beautiful!
i love this!
thanks for entering and a blessed Christmas
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yeah,
my Mom is very cool! thanks for the contest - Kevin
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awwww. that was soooo cute. i was nice the way there were little clues everywhere and then there was a cross and then... well you get the picture. i liked reading this piece. and im sure other people will enjoy it to
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I have to say thanks
to Mom on this one... I wrote it, but it was her inspiration to create such a memorable Christmas morning - thanks for reading - Kevin
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Very beautiful story, wonderful idea, great memory and such a lesson.
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Thanks
I appreciate your comments... I also hve to thank my Mom (she pulled this off) - take care -Kevin
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I love this story about a great idea for Christmas, and a cool memory! Thanks for the entry! Merry Christmas!
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Thanks
I have to give credit to my Mom on this one, she actually created this priceless Christmas memory. I appreciate your thoughts and time - Kevin
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Beautifully Written!
Wow! This is so uplifting and powerful in its message. This is needed so much, especially in these times where it seems the true meaning of the season has been lost to material goods. Very nice write, and thanks so much for sharing. Blessings,Patty
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Thanks Patty
You have a vert genuine spirit of caring... I appreciate and welcome any comments you have for me. - Kevin
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Wow, this is really good!
What a beautiful story and message within of the true and lasting meaning of Christmas. I enjoyed reading this and it is very well written. Thank you for sharing this with us here! It is quite inspirational. Congratulations of the trophies. You so deserved them.
Karen
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Thank you very much
I really appreciate your comments... I do have to give credit to my Mom on this one, for she actually created this priceless Christmas memory... take care - Kevin
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You have a children's Christmas book here , so endearing this is, humor and family so precious.
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great idea... I do have to give credit to my Mom who concocted and actually pulled off this priceless Christmas memory. - Kevin
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Thanks for your entry. It was a pleasure to read this again.
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Thanks again
I thought I recognized your name... sorry for the duplication... I'm still trying to find my way around here.... not quite sure what I'm doing. - Kevin
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A beautiful story, for all to know, thanks for sharing.
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Thanks
I appreciate your time. This was an easy one to write, it happened just this way... thanks Mom - take care, Kevin
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Now this is what I tear jerker!! Beautiful, funny, a bit disappointing in between thoughts, then wow, the punch lines hit , very nice poem to my contest, this I think made my Christmas... thanks for the entry, good Luck...VOE
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Linda
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Thanks
Linda, I appreciate your thoughtful review... what a wonderful feeling as a writer to "make someone's day" - you just made mine - Kevin
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Oh your poem brought tears of joy to my eyes. What a wonderful way to celebrate Christmas! I love the cross at the end. Thanks for sharing this amazing write with us all I so enjoyed reading this morning. hugs Theresa
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this wa s awesome
this was awesome and so fun, what a way for the kids to find their gifts.and then to see what christmas is all about.what a jolly treat.i'm bookmarking this.great job and flow.plus wonderful message.
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for reading and marking this story... it was an easy one to write, just tell it like it happened. I appreciate your kind words - Kevin
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Awsome!
Yayyyyyyyyyyy!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! clap, clap, clap!!!!!
I love it!
Bravo!
CP
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Wow, Thanks
My first "bravo" - I'm excited... thanks ... I glad you enjoyed this... I can't really take much credit for it (I just wrote the story), my mom actually did it. - Kevin
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What a beautiful Christmas poem. I enjoyed every word and just love the lesson that it holds. Good luck in the contest.
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my mom is awesome! what a great memory she created... thanks for reading - Kevin (green newbie)
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This is a great poem filled with such lovely christmas memories. Thank you for sharing and best of luck in my contest
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Thanks
this was a very cool thing my mom did... memorable. Thanks for reading - Kevin (green newbie)
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