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Angels/Gods/Goddess

Angels of fallen desire

demons in eternal fire

Lucifer fell from grace

straight to hell, landing upon his face

distant fires is his horrible home

horns aflame no need for a comb.

 

 

Trying to be here and there

to flit and fly everywhere

Angels are in our daily lives

working makeing all of us strives

in the world of chaos and woe

where else is it that we shall go?

 

Apollo was one, Medusa another

they each had sisters and brother(s)

Zeus was the king of this clan

standing upon forever shifting sand

today we have no need of them

instead we look for some guy named Ben.

 

 

 

 

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 12

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    Indeed, this is what happened. All religions are the same in the way there are good and bad types of Gods, just like there are people.


  • HugsForEveryone
    December 4, 2008
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    Line thirteen, it's spelled "making" not "makeing". Spelling mistakes distract the reader from the poem and you should use spell check. It's a helpful tool.
    I felt like the rhyming was forced, it didn't make sense at times and you seemed to have tried to shove in a few random words just for the rhyming.
    Thank you for donating points
    ~Docteh


  • FlamesDragoness
    November 20, 2008

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    clever and delightful wit!
    I enjoyed this poem....chuckled too at the ending!
    I am American..i probably would have replaced
    ben with Carmen Sandiego or some guy named
    Bill of Rights.
    well done!
    well done!
    flamesdragoness
    thankyou for your entry!