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Shattered Hopes

She stood staring at the pianos keys, covered with glass,
the glass he had shattered in his red hot fiery rage
upon learning that she had danced with a man of class
who was not he. She was dumbfounded, unable to engage.

This man, an artist at the keyboard who she hoped to marry
had, over a dance rejected her, and would listen to no plea.
She was devastated and felt she had done no wrong. Gary
must recant and ask her forgiveness or she was totally free.

His face was lived and his eyes were glazed with hate.
She smiled, hoping to reconcile, but he looked through her,
as if she did not exist. The situation was certainly not great,
but hope surged in her heart! Unfortunately he acted like a cur.

Their romance, like the shattered glass was hopelessly broken,
never to be mended because he was a jealous angry fool.
She felt liberated, glad that before commitment, she had a token
of his real being, an ogre at best. She'd not be his simple tool.

 

She withdrew any possible connection to this frightful beast 

and vowed to find another of pure and giving heart

to find a true and compassionate man; a love feast

who in true romance would provide her a jump start. 

Author notes

The shattered glass on the keys of the piano represented shattered romance to OldBear34.

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  • PurpleEmoFoofCheese
    November 20, 2008

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    An awesome composition of words! A beautiful, yet painful image spun into a story full of heartache. Your very talented
    Thz for the amazing read,

    ~Aly


    • OldBear34 silver member
      November 22, 2008
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      Thanks!

      Thank you for your most kind words. You are so welcome. With your praise, I'll continue to try to write for the heart.


  • ChunkyC
    November 20, 2008

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    Wow! Absolutely beautifully written! This story is told in such a way that it flows magnificantly! Such great detail put into this work. I'm not normally a huge fan of rhyme because most people force it, but here I didn't even realize you were rhyming until I went back and glanced over the poem a second time. Great job here! I've never read a good poem like this that is technically written well. Great job and good luck in the contest!

    • OldBear34 silver member
      November 22, 2008
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      Thanks for the High Praise!

      Since I love to rhyme, I love the fact that you didn't immediately notice it. Rhyme should not be the dominant feature of the poem. In my mind it should be subtle and seen as a secondary feature to the emotive appeal of the piece. Your comments make me feel as if I have come close to achieving that goal.