Hickory cradles
sparrows within hollowed nooks;
ancient heartbeat stirs,
coveting God's creation
nestled within her bosom.
A contest entry
- "Tree Poetry" by Victory Gin.
1050 points, ended November 26, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful imagery! Again, another tranquil write. So short yet so beautiful. I love this.
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Wow. This is incredible. I love the soft, calming feel of the flowing words.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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I know little of Japanese Poetry but this was nice. I like the interpretation of the sparrow inside the tree being its heartbeat. It makes me think of the importance of song as though the entire universe depends upon it. Very nice...
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This is fantastic. Excellent imagery that soothes you,..calming you down. I love your wordings, they are perfect.
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wow this is absolutely gorgeous- what a fantastic image you have conjured up for us, and the subtle Biblical allusions is just so well done- some of the best use of allusion I have seen in poetry. Excellent poem in every way. I really enjoyed this!
It is the kind of poem to memorize because it is so filled with truth, beauty, and is so uplifting. This is one not to be forgotten and I hope you try to publish it in a place where it can bring inspiriation to people who need it and can appreciate it.
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meditative and lovely. Very sensitive and clean write.
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I really like this poem.
So few words creating an abundant picture.
Beautiful.
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Beautiful...nice work on this one Joseph... I enjoyed what I read here. THANKS!!!
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Such beauty in little brown birds! ...and God's creation.
Lovely, lovely poetry to cherish this morning.
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I adore how your poetry is put together, you always seem to be able to find just the right words to use. I can always see your words as a picture in my mind - and God knows I love sparrows.
Once again you've managed to fit an idea so large (literally) into so few words.
Thank you.
Ashley A. Wolfe -
ooohh! what a nice poem to wake up to ! this is beautiful Its always a task to get what we are thinking down to just a few lines and real talent can do it without loosing they original message .Just wonderful!
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this has a calming feeling. well done!
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