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A Lament of a Lost Ghoul

A soul long lost
Taken from the living untimely
Risen from the shadows
A shade, to roam with the living.
With a hollow heart
There is a yearning
Heed the melancholy lament
Echoes of a lusting spirit
Carried through by shady mist
A captured soul, to never be!

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  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    December 5, 2008
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    A shade with a hollow heart created such a strong image I stopped and just re-read those couple lines over and over

    Excellent write, though the text is hard to read against the background

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    Thank You for Your Entry & Best of Luck
    Stay safe
    ~Manda


  • nature
    November 25, 2008

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    This poem is well done on the topic

    and short to be a lovely write.
    Truly ghosts make one feel fear and to write about them is quite courageous.
    Congrats.