My head in a cloud
buried beneath a dust storm
of impenetrable thoughts
secure in my memories
never to waver.
these feelings
of torment and regret
pushing through
my puzzled mind
love is crazy
a whirlwind of emotions
torrential,
as hail within a winter storm
mazes made of moments
that I could never forget
words upon lips,
wonderful, wondering
but are they for real?
I question these heartbeats
and though, I could never let go
I push them aside
for the sake of the now,
not the back when.
Author notes
Just something I have been fighting with for years put into new words. LOL. Hope you like it, and I am sure if you have read any of my past works, you should somewhat get what this one is about, too! 
Also, help with spelling here will help me alot. My stupid IE died on me, and I have to use firefox and it won't let me spell check.. damn thing!
Please tell me what you think
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wow!
this poem was grate...dare i say i can realte to it... this poem realy touched me..i had to read it agin! this is one of the best poems i've read...thank you
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Love your imagery....just amazing write...No speling problems that I can see. Fantastic penning using words around storms to create your feelings...
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mazes made of moments
that single line captured all of my attention. nice grouping of words there. the first stanza too is very well worded. all in all, a good and passionate write!!
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i loved how the last stanzawas worded....it was like literature music to my mind
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loved it... the words flowed very well..and overall a great poem.
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mazes made of moments that I could never forget
i truly enjoyed that line. thank you so very much for sharing this write with me today. it was worth the clicking. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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mazes made of moments
that I could never forget
words upon lips,
wonderful, wondering
but are they for real?
A stanza if you will that speaks truth and pain as we seek the way through the maze. The path not always as clear as we would like it to be but yet we seek for the easy way. I have often found myself looking and searching for a better way to go.
I would not change anything for this is a perfect piece look forward to more work by you!!!
Great Write!!!
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beautiful write. I liked the part of the maze and moments. I haven't thought of moments in life like that before. Like a maze that people try to make their way through, like people try to find their way through life. thanks for sharing and keep that pen flowing.
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"I question these heartbeats
and though, I could never let go
I push them aside
for the sake of the now,
not the back when."
This verse just sang to me. Wonderful thoughts expressed in wonderful rhythm - very well done.
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Great work and welcome back
Krys! It's great to see you writing
again. Love is indeed a whirlwind
of emotions that we cannot control.
When you find yourself lost in the
clouds of torment and sadness, just
always know that the sun will rise again
tomorrow. Lovely work here my friend
and take care. Great to read you again!
Jeremy0826
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