You lightly touched me
while I was driving west,
and when your fingers drew
little circles on my vest
I swerved south, then north,
while you caressed the rest;
aroused in all directions,
but going south felt best.
Author notes
Keep both hands on the wheel.
A contest entry
- lately.... by written-in-ink.
700 points, ended December 6, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Driving (prewrites welcome) by Danna Hobart.
490 points, ended January 13, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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LMAO
Um, I didn't mean to disturb you. I will just back out the door and ah, let you do, ah, whatever it is you were doing
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Excellent
I really like this risque write. Your imagery is fantastic. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done. -
Nice take on the prompt - in all directions. A lot said in few words, and the scene was instantly recognisable. Congratulations on the trophy.
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i love this..! it reminds meof somethinh=g that hppened to me before. excellent pen!!!!
becca
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a very well put together piece.
loved the rhyme and the message it sent.
well done and gratz on the bronze
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a picture esque poem, i liked this very much, the ending line felt akward upon the first run throughs, but i wouldn't advise for change
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Hahahah. This was funny. Great write, easily a winner!
Good luck!
Love
Alyzeh
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Haha! beautifully written and funny! I like your take on the prompt! good luck in the contest!
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lol
good advice
that i need
hahah
lol
and i thinkk most of us can relate to this
really we can
i love it
thank you so much
for entering
and
trust me
ohh i know
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cute. Good driving skills, too, since you didn't crash.
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