Hearts tight
Tears Loose
Beats fast
But lost, aloof
Head aches
Thoughts deep
How much can it take?
Dark nights...no sleep
Illusion, delusions
Scenarios of life
Dream up a conclusion
Filled with strife
Worrisome...anxious
Agonizing weary
Fatigue
Sore muscles
Vision getting bleary
Tired body
Irritated mind
Lungs full of air
Yet heart is blind
Eye strain
Neck pain
Fast thoughts
Slow brain
What's next?
Too vain
Its Not about me
It's the hurricane
...Maybe
Its my Anxiety
A contest entry
- Intricate Simplicities by Asabouros..
600 points, ended December 4, 2008, 8 entries
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What did you think
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I'm sorry, this poem was not written in the form that I asked for.
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should it be tired body?
I have had all those symptoms. Very good write. I love it. -
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Thanks
Yes thanks for catching that..I changed it. Thanks again.
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Excellent description of anxiety....being one who has suffered from it...i must say this is quite unnerving to read. Good job!
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Thank you very much I appreciate your thoughts!
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Woahh.
This was crazy!
It was like, a beat throught the whole thing, and I love the rhythm.
It also displays the emotions to the words well.
In my mind it creates the illusion of a broken video with the words pulsing.
It's one I will have to re-read a few times, because it wasvery good.
Thanks for entering my contest!!
♥
:Keara
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Wow
Thank you so much...it was a spontaneous write with how I felt at the exact moment...i guess it worked because it was real! Thank you.
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welcome to allpoetry
I absolutely love this... maybe because it's the way your thoughts and words flow together. The unique rhythm.. or how I can relate so well to every word. Wonderful job writing this out.
Thank you for sharing your words.
Keep writing on
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