[I] keep wondering
what Y.O.U
think of
M
E
because simplicity was N V R
E E
something you obliged by
r-e-ME-m-b-e-r
what it was about U.S.
that made you
F
A
L
L
so F+A+S+T
an eternal ~flow~
is n{0}thing but what you pretend it to be
Two.night[s] is all we need to prove
just what LO/VE *ME*ans
y[OUR] {emo}tions bre/ak U*S ap/art
don't Know ?how? much Lo-o-onger
this will
L
A
S
T
$ing me a $ong of $weet $urrender
where A.L.L you can do is re*call[me]
for{get} who I A.M
I'm on the F:R:I:N:G:E of a break\down
but our story is f-a-r from [over]
^to^night means no{thing}
redemption sings a.l.o.n[e][g] to your Vo/ic/e
I LO/VE you
at least
I ~think~ I do
Please don*t let U^S fa/de
A
W
A
Y
Author notes
my first dirty pretty opinions owuld b highly apreciated
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what the fuck? lol
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its a dirty pretty poem ^_^ so thats y the structure is all bajoinka
but i dunno i just made a poem and added stuff to the words
like this is somethin that i rly am feeling
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i usually dislike dirty pretty, but i like it
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heylo darling
thank you for the comment ^_^
it was my first so i was tryin ^_^
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Very nice. You grasp the concept & content well. I like the play of "me" and "our" within the confines of other words - quite creative in your first attempt!
Good job!
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thnx. the original was better
but it got messed up somehow so i had to rewrite the ending
i tried ^_^
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