Sequence, a splat as drops descends to floor
in timeless motions, ordered pain is known.
A life of tears shall find their way, below.
A pool of mem'ries congeal forming pain
A rose will bleed, true, thorns of its mis'ry
as knife releases myself to outer world.
Anguished a bleeding heart pumps soul to feel
the cold of distant time and downcast space.
In time as blood and water become one
the tears will stream as red, this rivers flow
as torrents fall, an ache released, afflux.
My peace returns, sacrifice is fully made.
The cutting edge has solaced feelings known
in rite of truest passage, numbed and free
I wash the hurt of living down the drain
and bleed no more for you, I die in self.
My force has cascaded, world of bubbling hurt.
I live in grip of hand that tightens vice
on jug'lar, ev'ryday the deathlike clamp
of love will clench its fist in prideful rage
A contest entry
- your black & white needs a little bit of red... by Immortal Obscurity.
1750 points, ended November 26, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Stun me. by heavenbird.
590 points, ended December 5, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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In anguish contained this is a masterpiece of torment lashed to a primal force. "i die in self," "of love will clench its fist in prideful rage." those words caught in my throat and whispered the withering of a soul. another great write
bravo!!
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This is very beautiful.
Good job!
best of luck!
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Talk about cutting to the chase! I hope that there's nothing too personal here, and if there is, I'm sorry you ever had to go through such pain.
Indeed, you have owned these words, as this is different from most poems I've seen on the subject. Something about the contractions also adds an air of antiquity to the write, like it was written before the genre became mainstream. Well done, and thanks for entering!
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beautifully written .. you have a way with words that is a talent in its own..
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Wonderful
Very descriptive and so well expressed. Best of luck in the contest.
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