I've been following you for days now,
watching every step you take,
every graceful move you make.
You're like a dancer on the stage,
and I your crazed fan.
You're just like all the others,
I've watched in the past,
treating your women like dirt.
Well my dear, I'm here now,
you don't need them anymore.
I'll give you a pleasure
you've never, ever felt before,
give you what the others couldn't.
I'll give you a taste of it,
show you what I can do with it,
my favourite tool of the trade.
I've been following you for days now,
watching every step you take,
every graceful move you make.
You're like a dancer on the stage,
and I your crazed fan.
I'll give you a pleasure
you've never, ever felt before,
give you what the others couldn't.
I'll give you a taste of it,
show you what I can do with it,
my favourite tool of the trade.
It catches the light,
in a way that your eyes do not,
I'll show you how in just a moment,
let me finish tying you to the bed,
I don't want you running away now.
The click of locking cuffs,
like a chorus of angels heard under
your cries for mercy and forgiveness.
Dear, I've not a merciful bone,
in this body of mine, and
forgiveness, a gift I do not give.
Hush now, dear, this won't hurt,
for me that is, it will for you.
I'll go nice and slow,
build the pleasure and the pain.
I'll show you what I can do with it,
my favourite tool of the trade.
Lets begin.
I'll start at your feet,
undoing you slowly, piece by piece,
and body part, by body part.
Until you're like a jigsaw puzzle,
and I can sculpt you back together.
I've been following you for days now,
watching every step you take,
every graceful move you make.
You're like a dancer on the stage,
and I your crazed fan.
I'll give you a pleasure
you've never, ever felt before,
give you what the others couldn't.
I'll give you a taste of it,
show you what I can do with it,
my favourite tool of the trade,
for blood and architecture.
Author notes
Title: Blood and Architecture
CHALLENGE 4:
Write about a FICTIONAL female serial killer. You can do anything for this one, just write me a good female serial killer.
You can use any weapon EXCEPT POISONING!!!!!!!!!!
I hope she is what you were looking for 
A contest entry
- the DARKWRITE challenge rides again by Ktulu Blackwolfe.
600 points, ended December 20, 2008, 39 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Oooh so creepy. I too thought the repitition was a bit too much, but yes, the serial killer/stalker poem succeeded in being creepy and scary.
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Thank you
Yes, reading over it now, I think the repitition is a bit much too, oh well something to keep in mind for next time
Once again thank you for the comment
'Wolf
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O0O0O0O0h I do not want to be on her bad side... she sounds scawwy.. the repetition was well a bit redundant.. I think you could have "sculpted" more of a story but I don't know the rules of the contest.
Overall a great dark write.
Good Job!
♥♥♥ Kat
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She is scary!! >.<
Thank you!
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I liked this, it wasn't a cliche' type of serial killer here. Very good job with this.
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Thank you
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Nice! Sort of a gentle dark, nothing sinister in what you wrote but what is implied. Neat read, Thanks for entering and good luck
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Thank you
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My favorite lines ...
"The click of locking cuffs,
like a chorus of angels heard under
your cries for mercy and forgiveness."
This is the most memorable lines in this piece.
The title is very enticing ... the piece itself is very good indeed, the metaphors are lovely and how it ends is bittersweet ... great job ...
G.
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Thank you
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ooo nice
I liked this one, and you combined multiple prompts I like that and you didn't do it with poisoning either, so that is a plus.
I think you picked one of my favorite title's that I found, even for me that would have been a hard one to write for, but this one was good, it had an art vibe to it.
Especially how you ended it.
This was one of my favorite lines:
The click of locking cuffs,
like a chorus of angels heard under
your cries for mercy and forgiveness.
Nice metaphor usage here.
Good job, thanks for entering.
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