The night repels
The darkest of the dark,
It gives lovers hope
And horrors substance.
You feel like you're spinning
Turning and twirling
to another’s hand
Following a melody you’ve never known,
Grasping you reach for something
Stretching you so slowly you go mad,
Only to wake with the darkness pressing in.
Hardly daring to close your eyes again…
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A contest entry
- Picture Prompt PIF by Polaja.
1200 points, ended December 3, 2008, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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The first stanza really sets the scene well for this piece - I really love the last line
I think that this would flow better without the capitalisation of every line, but that is just my opinion 
... the images in this poem are crafted beautifully - and the take on the picture is great!
Thank you for entering
Polly
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Wonderfully dark. There is a disorienting sense here like the feeling I sometimes get when laying on my back and staring up into the night sky. Whith no point of reference in my peripheral vision and only the moving dark clouds and remote stars in my field of view I get a strange sense of vertigo, like I will fall up into the sky and be swallowed by the darkness.
I think "your" should be "you're" in the fifth line of the poem.
My favorite lines are the first stanza, espescially the last two lines.
The night repels
The darkest of the dark,
It gives lovers hope
And horrors substance.
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