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- holy haven -

Missing image

*

certain

are we that a

spirit of comfort shall

gather round you allowing for

escape

~*~

within

horizons far

your heavenly father

calls upon his most beautiful

angels

~*~

lifting

you up to a

holy haven and your

burdens no longer have any

power

~*~

delight

in his gracious

son and forgive all of

mortal sinners wearing guilty

garments

~*~

sending

you a gift from

above granted are his

ever lasting promises which

abound

~*~

mothers

see her children

without being close by

her inner spirit whispers, here

my child

*

 

Author notes

- Dedication to Kim, aka Paloszoo -

 

A

 

Garland Cinquain

[6 Cinquains used]

 

Syllable Count:

 

2 4 6 8 2

2 4 6 8 2

2 4 6 8 2

2 4 6 8 2

2 4 6 8 2

2 4 6 8 2

- No punctuation used on purpose for presentation,

except one, for Tone -

 

 

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • Amera gold member
    December 7, 2008

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    Congreds fot the trophy! You composed an amazing Cinquain filled with emotionand expressing a wonderful statement of faith.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • poetryality silver member
    December 1, 2008

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    You have written this form seamlessly. You make it look easier than it really is to write. The tribute is beautiful! I see Kim adores every word, as do I. The fourth cinquain is my favorite, although the entire poem is most striking to the heart I would think, for All women.

    I wish you well in the challenge.


    Much Love Always ♥

    Renee


    • Arkbear gold member
      December 1, 2008
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      Hello Sister Renee

      Your review is so sweet...you know how to make the Bear smile

      God bless you,

      Brother Bear ~


      *...hops over to see if Sis is in the contest too...hehe*


  • Paloszoo gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    Holy Wow! This is absolutely amazing. Stunning. Perfect. I'm speechless and honored that you put so much effort into such a beautiful piece for me. Thank you


  • ennovy silver member
    November 20, 2008

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    So honest, emotional.....you my wonderful surely expressed your love for our FATHER......and his son Jesus......God Bless...novy

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