I stood within the turmoil and turned another page
The storm was all consuming within my book of rage
Each chapter was a story of life that I had seen
An epic in the making, the worst that there had been.
The gale began in childhood and carried me away
Colliding in my teen years where skies were dark and grey
The rain became a torrent that drowned me where I stood
I carried on regardless, just like a good girl should.
A hurricane came calling and held me in it's power
I scurried in each corner, it was it's finest hour
Alone within it's circle I cried into the deep
But it just kept on howling and would not let me sleep.
A sudden glint of sunshine threw hurricane of course
It showed no sign of calming and offered no remorse
I reached into that sunlight and held on for my life
I had to end this torment, no longer be it's wife.
The rain mixed with the sunlight, a miracle appeared
A multi- coloured rainbow ,shone as the rainclouds cleared
The raindrops stopped their patter and dried that special day
I walked out of the turmoil, the day you came my way.
Author notes
Look for the Rainbow.You will find it.
A contest entry
- "Sunshine after the Rain" by JinSays.
1750 points, ended November 22, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is inspiring and yo are right. If yo hold on thro the storm and keep looking for the rainbow yo will find it. I am having keyboard problems sorry for the bad spelling.
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Touching
Good write Gwen. Stormy but resolved and tender at the end. Nice work.
Sag
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Sweet and moving poem, and I dare say probably has the most important message of the day.
Wonderful, sincerity shines through.
Excellent take on the prompt provided.
I wish you all the best.
Love,
jin
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I love the way you play with words Ros. You tied this poem so well with the ending. You used metaphor wonderfully tieing your life into the reading of a book. Another masterful piece. I really enjoyed it. good luck in the contest You should do great.
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Excellent
Liked the style and the reality of the work. Very well expressed .Thank you for writing.
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This was an extremely well written poem. The imagery is simply amazing. I especially like the last stanza, with all the colorful imagery. Really great write!
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This was a very touching poem. The message was clear and close to probably everyone, especially the teen part. Teenagers (no matter how great their lives could be) always have dark and grey moments. But the real messag eI got from your write was that everyone (any age) has a hard time or a hard part of lfe and eventually things will pull through and rainbows will come and you'll get through it. Very inspiring. Oh just one quick thing I noticed, in the 4th stanza, 1st line, you said "hurricane of course" not sure if you meant "off" but I was just drawing it your attention in case it was a typo. Good luck in the contest! Keep up the great work. -Pammi
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Well written
Another great way to come back into the fold by reading your great poetry that is wholesaome and full of hope. Never dull or boring it always tells a sweet story that takes the reader through a mini adventure with a happy ending.
Love Bazza
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I truely enjoyed reading this. Its got great flow and rhyme.
I absolutely love it!
Awesome write. And thanks so much for sharing it. -
Superb
Or as others have said: "Look for the silver lining".
A very fine write, indeed. Just as it is. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Here's a google link for the old song: "Look for the Silver Lining" -
http://www.google.com/search?sourceid=navclient&ie=UTF-8&rls=RNWO,RNWO:2008-24,RNWO:en&q=%3CLook+for+the+silver+lining+%2D+song%3E -
very very nice. it rhymes excellently and fits together well. the rythym is nice, and is not for a second awkward. good job. keep writing.
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