Your hiding
within the shade
of desires leathal cravings,
urging and pleading
that pleasures tedious
hunger will not be denied
as you fall by the wayside
watching and waiting
as lust beckons, once again.
Do you want it or don't you?.
A contest entry
- 10 picture prompt options by SoulfulBubbles.
400 points, ended December 17, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
any feed back is always helpful
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I like this, I see someone who wants and teases but pulls back and the honest question is put in their face, do you want it or don't you? sensual write with questions left on baited breath.
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Many many thanks
Have you thought about putting those two poems in that we worked on. I think they are good and would love to hear some feed back from the readers, what do you think?. -
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sure what ever you want to do i am fine with it
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Do you want it or not? Hiding in the lustfull shades...if I don't say yes, then it falls to the wayside! Interesting poem. Good luck in your contest. ~Sie
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Thank you
Many thanks for your time and reply.
TC
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nice
sounds a bit ominous but hey the reader could enjoy
a little 'darkness' with their sensualness can't they?
good stuff!
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Thanks man
Many thanks for reading this and coming from a writer with your skills is very heartening.
Gratitude.
TC
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Sensual
I loved the ending...do you want it or don't you? Such a loaded question after such a stimulating read. Fantastic. I have a new one...want you input. "Fly Me Higher" it's in the shameless box lol. If you get a chance...Fantastic write. I loved it. ~~
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Hmmmmmm
Could be better but time was running out on me.
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