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~ Intimate Introspection ~

 

 

 

 

Wet cement hardened, compressed us
within virginity's bassinet~

when we shifted sand, unearthed reason
bed of lilies begged to thrive.

You turned my hourglass, held me
upside down after double doors widened
for intimate introspection.

I felt weightless, wickedly awakened
between hot faucet drips, friction
bathed our inhibitions in.

Privacy was irrevelent, private parts
exposed for examination
with a fragment of your rib Adam,
I respectively returned.













 

Author notes

Prompt:
When My Pulse Flowed Innocence

No more than 150 Words~

Background courtesy of Gypsy~ Thankies

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  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    November 25, 2008

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    whew! congrats on the gold, well deserved for such well weaved verses
    love the imagery and vocabuary used throughout

    Tasha


  • thepoetssoul
    November 25, 2008

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    What a stunner you have written sweet soul
    The imagery and metaphor is exellent.
    Your poem was the undisputed winner for sure
    Thanks for sharing your heart and spirit.
    Congradulation's

    Tony


  • delightfulmess silver member
    November 21, 2008

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    Oh my goodness!!!!
    Outstanding take with such beautiful words
    and presented brilliantly.

    Thank you so much for this wonderful entry in my contest.



    Delila


  • Swan song gold member
    November 21, 2008
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    I can see you are back and the poetry world just brightened once again! simply beautiful


  • StarEyes
    November 20, 2008

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    Holy Moly! This is beyond words. I love the soft and gentle, yet steamy way this reads! This is fantastic! I love it!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nettie


  • HaleyMary
    November 19, 2008

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    Beautiful write, Desire. I liked the ending. It seemed like an oxymoron in a way, like the virginity, but the parts being exposed. Good use of contradictory terms. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.

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