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Star Gazing

Like the greatest star
you gaze on me; a
constellation
that maps out our future,
draws out our plans.
You are mine, me,
my everything,
because you love me.
Because you love me,
I love myself.

Author notes

perfect motion

A contest entry

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  • Joseph Hollis
    December 16, 2008

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    I can see why this took the gold. Such a beautiful, endearing write. Loved every word of it. Thanks for sharing.


  • They Say Shannon
    November 27, 2008

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    This is great.
    It's so simple.
    So very simple, yet it's beautiful.
    And it captures the feeling I'm talking about perfectly. Wonderful job. <3

    Thanks for entering and good luck. <3


  • Rhythm Child
    November 19, 2008
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    like the greatest star << i thought this line was so touching to read