even my sense of comfort
is switch-hitting these days
i can run around naked
in front of eyes i hardly know
but then bundle myself away
when a question catches me
tipped-toed and balancing
on that oh-so-thin line
it is the perpetual movements
of north and south
that pull at my core
and send me into a panic
when the connectors
are not matching up
and i am staring at your jawline
and what are affairs anyhow
but lustful leaning on borrowed time
and who am i to say no
to secrets held in ears
and the thrill of it all
even if only in my head
Author notes
Prompt: Shy
- afraid, apprehensive, bashful, cautious, conscious, coy, demure, diffident, disinclined, distrustful, fearful, hesitant, humble, introvert, introverted, modest, recessive, reluctant, reserved, reticent, sheepish, timid, unassertive, uneager, unwilling, wary
A contest entry
- Word Prompt by Lj-.
700 points, ended December 3, 2008, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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You were definitely on one of your creative rolls yesterday ... this is wonderfully introspective and full of thought provoking good stuff (I like thought provoking good stuff
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wow.
omg
[13595180501xapplause.]
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..but i am too poor. ];
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there is always that lurking moment that seems to make us all self consciously aware.
well conveyed emotion
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i adore what you did with the prompt with this, i can sure feel the shyness, and i also like what you chose to be shy about because it really makes for a great read, best of luck in the contest
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"it is the perpetual movements
of north and south
that pull at my core
and send me into a panic
when the connectors
are not matching up
and i am staring at your jawline"
I like this piece. It's full of unease, longing, nerves. The middle stanza does a very good job of describing a bi-polar panic attack, the "naked in times square" alien feeling that overtakes sometimes when you don't feel comfortable in your own skin.
Or any other situation where you're pulled in multiple directions for that matter. I really dug your flow on this piece, it seems effortless for a work on what I perceive to be about effort, and willful restraint in the face of different urges. Keep at it.
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you are the best!!! "naked in times square" ! exactly!!!!
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