You come up behind me and hold me,
as long as you can,
even in front of you friends.
You give me little notes,
even when I'm right beside you,
even if it's just to say you care.
You kiss me on the forehead,
so sweet and genteel.
When we walk on the beach,
you hold my hand,
and if I get cold you give me your hoodie,
and hold me close.
I never want those moments to end.
If I'm sad or sick,
you always come over to cheer me up,
you bring my favorite movies,
and we cuddle as we watch them through the night.
Soon we fall asleep,
and I know I'm safe for I am in your arms.
When you leave,
a few moments later,
you call just to say goodnight.
Author notes
one of my friends posted this thing on myspace about what he would do for his girlfriend and I thought it was really cute and sweet. so I took my favorite parts and turned in into this.
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aw its lovely! seriously i love it!
Awesome write and really sweet.
He sounds like a great guy lol.
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I like this, it's cute and pure and innocent, great picture of love as love should be, which I'm a big fan of. Two minor kinks I'd look at: "we cuddle as we watch them throw the night"... did you mean through the night? and the second to last line should be "later" with one t. I really enjoyed reading this, thanks for entering!
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Great write, I like that it's a spin off that makes it even better. You have the ability to put yourself into different places and situations and describe it perfectly without ever having to be there. Great job!
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cute write
I can tell this is a write about young love, well you did good with this. There is a few spelling mistakes,so you need to maybe fix those. Other than that good job, and good luck in the contest.
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aww this is sooooo
sweet!
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Awww, this is awesome!!
Great job, Avalon!
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amazing
that poem was soon good!!!
i let my guy friend read it a dn even he loved it!!!
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