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[ Mold me and conform me ]

Mold me and conform me
So when I am gone you will have me
When you toss and turn without me
You won't need me
Leaving the scent behind of me
After several days it fades
I know you love me...

But not as much as my love for you
Growing each day
I can't live the next without you
In my arms
  In my bed
When merely you are in my mind
I go mental
insane
simply derranged

If I can't have you I feel as though I'll die
Seven hours fells like Seven days-
and those days feel like weeks
If I went one day without you my love
They would declare me mentally ill

And carry me off against my own free will
To a place where we could never be

So here I am once again
Holding my pillow
Smelling you on it
Dreaming of you in transit
Then you walk through the door
And I am sane again

Author notes

This was based on missing someone and not being able to live without them based on my boyfriend and i the love poem somehow ended up turning into a derranged mindstate of insanity. It wasn't how I planned it would come out but I like it. =]
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  • They Say Shannon
    November 27, 2008
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    This was cute. (:
    I like the last stanza a lot.
    I do know this feeling, and how you could have just seen them,
    but you still want them there a gain even only a few hours later.

    A few parts of this seemed a little forced with the rhyming, but overall it as good.
    Great job, and thanks for entering. <3