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El invierno se levantó

Snowflake glistens on a leaf,
Cold aproaching like a thief.
Powdery winds gently roll,
Ultimate rush enters the soul.
Take us where we want to be,
Bring hope and peace on your snowy sea.
Cleansing the earth with a sheet of white,
Take away all the doubt and fright.
Shimmer and shine, dream and dance.
Chill the bad, overcome with romance.
Breathtaking beauty endlessly flows
From one little snowflake on one red rose.

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  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    October 17

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    This is very beautifully written. I loved the last line the most. I would love to see snow on a rose. I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest


  • adios muchachos gold member
    October 4

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    Porque ese titulo esta escrito en espanol, y el poema esta escrito en ingles?
    Si existe el lexico en espanol debes agregarlo a este poema tambien, no es asi?

    Es bastante bonito escrito como es, pero, yo esperaba un poema Catalan, segun sea el titulo.

    • pumpykin
      October 4
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      Lol I'm terribly sorry, but I don't speak spanish; I just liked how the title of this sounded in spanish, which I got on an online translation site, so I have no idea what your comment actually says >< I'm sure it's nice though, considering you gave me three applause


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    September 24

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    This has such magical images in it, so tender and captivating. Well done to you and best to you in the contest


  • Diminished Capacity gold member
    September 5
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    This is breathtakingly beautiful. Thank you so much for this exquisite piece.


  • Violinstrings silver member
    January 11
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    idea of hope for spring too

    this is wonderful even without your picture i see the vision of a rose


  • ConjurerCaptainTam
    November 23, 2008
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    not that u need the luck; and have some claps x

  • ConjurerCaptainTam
    November 23, 2008

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    WOW i have to agree, utterly breath-taking. You have a knack for rhyming that i lack...i love rhymes so you have stolen my heart. All is incorporated so relaxed and beautifully written - weldone...i have some competition!!

    good luck x


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    November 20, 2008

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    BREATH TAKING

    your words flow like sweet magic and the pictures you have penned for the minds eye is awesome...i love the last line! Breathtaking beauty endlessly flows From one little snowflake on one red rose...sighs...i simply love it...i think i shall feature it for you


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    November 19, 2008

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    the rhyming gives this piece a flawless flow.
    lovely write
    good luck in the contest



  • LovesLostLiterature
    November 19, 2008
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    Wow this is very good! I love the descriptive parts along with the rhyming flow.


  • dustytiger
    November 19, 2008

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    wow this is so pretty, you have really captured something beautiful with this, and it rhymes, i really like this prompt it makes for some amazing poetry, best of luck in the contest


  • Rhythm Child
    November 19, 2008

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    BEAUTIFUL
    great entry
    thanks for taking part, wishing you luck would be an insult to your talent so take care

    message me for anything
    Billy (Rhythm Child)

  • StarGrrl
    November 19, 2008
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    Beautiful, I loved the rhyming and the way it was written. Good Write! Good luck in the contest.

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