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Scream On The Wind

 

 

 

every year she waits
same time, same place

you may catch her from the
corner of your eye,
out of place and alone,
always alone

fog descends
the time approaches

few passengers today

it’s not a busy line

no-one see the tears she cries
as she moves down the platform

vibrations on the cold rails
it’s coming, it’s coming...

 

fog parts as the engine pushes through -
the non-stop to Derby

she steps to the edge of the platform...

 

 

a scream on the wind
nothing more

un-mourned then... 

 

un-mourned now

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt...option 9

http://malleni.deviantart.com/art/Into-the-unknown-102575163

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  • arafura gold member
    November 19, 2008
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    Excellent. I love this!


  • csmmoms2
    November 19, 2008
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    Stunning

    Great storyline with picture prompt-perfect. I do love your style. -c


  • moonbumps silver member
    November 19, 2008

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    Wow and double wow-pitifully tragic and a stab to the heart.
    Brill write babes-hitting the mark bang on-
    xxx


  • Rhythm Child
    November 19, 2008

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    amazing how you have worded this, it flowed well and i must say the back ground is amazing


  • Legend silver member
    November 19, 2008

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    As one from Nottingham I can well understand the feelings this lady felt being stuck in Derby
    Jesting aside another strong piece that tell the story without really using the words the subject is about , but leaving the reader in no doubt what is occurring Excellent


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 19, 2008

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    very dark!

    Evocative FV haunting and compelling. You seem to be skirting suicide at the moment in your poetry, and doing it very well.

    Hard hitting

  • Bad Bill
    November 19, 2008
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    Deliciously creepy and a splendid response to the picture prompt. Love it!

    Bill

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