A society built on political aspirations
Is never free from the ills of tyranny
It is our belief in forming nations
That brings us to war eventually
A society maintained by egos and lies
Is always subject to the same routine
For when it draws enough flies
It will be remade no differently
A society cast down in the dust
Will only rise once again as it was
There is no end to things unjust
Only a redefining of what truth was
Why become part of an endless struggle
When change is an illusion at best
Our hearts and minds we still juggle
And our lies we shall never confess
Thanks to the weak, the strong endure
And continue their quest for wealth and power
For our intentions are gross and impure
And like animals, the weak get devoured
When the blood rains down and our bridges fall
And the ones who find truth break down the walls
From our hearts, into darkness truth will crawl
And once again leave us with nothing at all
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You've got some mad skillz dude. Haha, seriously though, I am very impressed by all your pieces that I've read so far. I'm very interested in what you say, but on top of that, the underlying form of how you say it is wonderful. The diction and flow adds to the power of your message. Well done, sir. I look forward to reading more!
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wow i love it. when i frst started reading i didnt think i would finish it.i guess just cause i dididnt feel like i was in the mood for reading somthing like this right then,i dont know.but it sucked me in i had to keep reading it is so powerful.very well written with a good flow.
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Love It
It's a great write =]
Very philosophical
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"Thanks to the weak, the strong endure
And continue their quest for wealth and power
For our intentions are gross and impure
And like animals, the weak get devoured"
Brilliant
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"A society maintained by egos and lies"
We were actually discussing the tendency to refer to the id in psychology the other day. The ego is actually a good thing... it balances out primal desires and the demands of society. It's the id that wants power, money, food, sex, security. Fun facts, and good poems. ^_^
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You are speaking about a Freudian theory. The context of ego in my poem is that definition that refers to egotism, conceit, and self-importance. Sorry about the confusion, but the ego in this case is certainly NOT a good thing.
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It flows well, especially for a rhyming piece. It manages, without falling into that horrible singsong tone that most do. You have some great images here too. The feeling of inevitable failure is a downer though, haha! Overall, nice work!
Always,
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Benjamin Franklin said very long ago that a democracy would get the government it deserved because it would vote it in. The issue we have in this country is that too many people do not vote. The meek shall inherit the earth...dirt.
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Hmm...well, it's not a bad poem, but I think it's really egotistical of you to bill it as "some of the finest literature ever produced".
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nice
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