Blasts of brass echo their way
up the spiral staircase.
Here sits the Jester,
alone in his tower.
Each vibrating sob resulting in a
chime from his hat.
Each blood stain, blending in with his colourful rags.
Foot steps destroy the tranquil loneliness,
and the metallic smell of conformity
embraces the room, once more.
"On your feet clown."
The feel of the cool metal against
his neck was the warmest he'd felt all day.
Like an animal,
he is presented to the crowd.
Here stands the Jester,
surrounded by no one,
enveloped by everyone.
The kiss of citrus.
The disorientation of a fist.
The lob of an apple.
He's dancing.
And with each prod,
he dances faster.
But his heart beats slower.
Author notes
MysteriousStrangerX
A contest entry
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Comments
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so different.
I love how this is not the same as everything else I tend to see... It definatly stands out in my mind. A good read. Good insight... well done. Finalist. -
Thank you for the entry
Its very different. The title definitely draws you in, but the poem closes the door behind you. Very very nicely done. I like it. -
Very nicely done!! I absolutely love the title, drew me in on first sight Thanks for entering my contest and good luck
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its got a nice flow and sounds great aloud. a great write and a better read!
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In a wat this reminds me of that song The day the music died. Overall a very good read! and I enjoyed thank you
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this is cute, but not the best i have read so far I like the peace no doubt about that and am glad you entered it into my contest
~GOOD LUCK~
*Dark Poet* -
weird and definitely original even though i could not quite decipher the meaning in this thank you for entering my contest and good luck
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Thank you for your beautifully penned entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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Wow
with a capital W
this is really confronting
i love this one
its my fav!
the imagery and emotion
welllllll doneee
=]
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Fantastic piece! Thank you so much for entering it in my contest. The imagery in this poem was so detailed and vivid!
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This is absolutely fantastically written. I love the imagery that goes along with it and the words are so powerful. It all flows wonderfully and makes so much sense. The title grabbed my attention and while reading it I couldn't take my eyes away from it!
Each vibrating sob resulting in a
chime from his hat.
Each blood stain, blending in with his colourful rags.
Amazing! Great job, you definitely deserve more than 3 applauds but I will give you them plus a million more!
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i like it. a lot. a whole lot.
there's really not much i can say, but it's heartbreaking and i love those last two lines. -
this was Awesome. i loved it! its bookmarked
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this touched me.
i think this merits a favouritization.
*hungrily goes to read more*
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Wow, this is great. I loved the topic, it's so unique. You wrote it beautifully.
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gifted
You have a gift for crawling inside the pain of another and wrenching out the poetic beauty of it all.
( I have added you to my favorites' list )
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ZOMG.
i really, really, really, reallyyyyyyy like this.
everything is spelt correctly
the imagery is beautiful and not at all trite
i kinda have a thing for jesters to begin with, so the subject is great too.
it's a pity i can only give you three little cheering heads. this was worth at least fourteen for all the happiness it brought me. ^.^
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Great imagery, each word had you anxious for the next. Good job!
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Wow.
What an incredibly creative piece that just flows so powerfully down the page I can not tear my eyes away!
"Here stands the Jester,
surrounded by no one,
enveloped by everyone."
Those lines are astounding! There is so much imagery bursting from them alone, the whole poem compliments those few lines
Excellent poem!
Best of Luck in the Contests
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Very original piece of writing. You painted a sad picture of hilarity and showed the reader what lies behind the jests. I like the contrast at the end, of the dance getting faster and the heart beating slower. Not entirely sure what is going on here "The kiss of citrus.
The disorientation of a fist.
The lob of an apple." but I enjoyed it, and the fragmented effect of it. Well done. -
I really enjoyed this i was slightly confused and lost at first but it has a great pulse as Kelsey said i really like it.
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I love this! it's somewhat confusing, but it's got a pulse. Awesome
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completely astonishing
Great job! I love this poem because it has so much heart. Great job. -
Honesty?
I enjoyed it. It had wonderful meter and flow. The rhythm was great, so the lack of rhyme goes unnoticed (unless that is what they are looking for). I loved it. It tells the sad tale of the one who bares the brunt of all. Fantastic write and I say >
to all who don't like it. ~~
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This rings true to this day, though jestors may not be around, the human trafficking industry is booming. Many people each year are put into situations where sole amusement, sort of like animals, results in the entertainment of everyone else. I like this poem in the portrayal of the underappreciated members of society (whether past or present) as throughout history we have all kind of masked the fact that deep down inside we are the same person.
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this is beautifully written,very sad and also dark, the imagry is fantastic and your use of words is perfect, thankyou for shareing
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great metaphor with the jester supposed to be a happy guy all the time.. making ppl laugh isnt easy and i suppose in those times the poor old jester either made em laugh or he got the chop! lol
thanx for sharing
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i loved the title
a great play on the day the music died
and a very well written poem
well done
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this is a very beautiful piece. i love the imagery . this has a hint of saddness in it and a jester is supposed to be so happy. very good work
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This is beautiful, the imagry is so vivid
the metalic smell of conformity embraces the room once more
brilliantly creative, bravo
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Ah...beautiful. I love it. It sounds so dark. I've never seen the jester presented like this before.
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really enjoyed the continued theme of metal - thought it complimented that of loneliness very well. previously being a class clown myself i know how one minute it seems your a king and the next no one wants to know you
"surrounded by no one,
enveloped by everyone"
Keep writing!
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wow this is such a heartbreaking write....your title really drew me in cos i couldn't really guess what it was about, but it really interested me, and let me tell you the rest of the poem did not disappoint.a really interesting and unique write, i really enjoyed reading this
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