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it was too dark
time ran out
the floor was to sticky
my eyes were closed
the funny thing is i lost it
my tire blew
i lost my contact
i thought you were some one else
they made me do it
i coldnt help my self
I'm too young to die
there was to much traffic
i didn't know your number
they said it was OK
i thought that that's what you liked
you gave me what i really liked i think
the motor fell on my head
i was mugged
you know what i lost track of time
its  not like I'm god
what was that you said i had a ear infection.
i didn't know how old i was
i gave birth today
but your a man
oh ya ..
that's my exwifes list

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what is that you think of this . how does it make you feel

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • SpydurPoet gold member
    December 5, 2008
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    ZOMG! Robbie! You won silver for this!! Awesome!!!

  • SpydurPoet gold member
    November 27, 2008

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    LOL. Hilarious. I absolutely loved it. You did a fantastic job. Fantastic. Best of luck in the contest!!
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 25, 2008

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    lol, see that is why you never right them down, you get them mixed up with someone else, lol this was good, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Mila7
    November 21, 2008

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    Hahahahaha! this was hilarious! Extremely well done, it sort of reminded me of Two and Half Men. Not that your Alan, but I can see the ex wife character presented here.


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    What a wise woman she was indeed!
    horribly afraid you may have lost a treasure!
    I'll report these to our Femme Fatale union, so she can receive
    her well earned PROMOTION!
    I loved ..."the well...it's not like i'm god!"

    hahahaha!
    ears/Seattle
    thankyou for your entry,
    and clever wit and ink!
    stuffing them into my pockets, to see if any actually will
    work.

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