My heart is weak now
it's been too long
my body throbbing
my mind is aching
it feels so wrong
my skin is frail
I try and try
to escape this body
alas with no avail
perhaps,
I was mistaken
perhaps,
I was wrong
perhaps,
I can't love
perhaps,
It has been too long.
Author notes
reserved urapns66
A contest entry
- For only poets up for a challenge by PureRomance.
700 points, ended December 3, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think in general? Improvements?
Comments
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awww!! its so sad
makes me wonna cry (kinda feel like the last part right now) ugh, you are such a great writter!
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Wow, you did a marvelous job with the title that I gave you. I agree with the previous poster. You did an excellent job with this brilliant masterpiece. Keep up the excellent work; best of luck to you in the contest and may God bless you always in all you do and write.
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wow!
this is good and very understandable.
"I was wrong
perhaps,
I can't love
perhaps,
It has been too long"
This line is my favorite and has the most meaning to me. I think most of us can relate to it, I know I can.
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