The fairest flesh, belies the
blackest death of the souls'
torments, toiling amidst the
cataclysmic despair within the
heart of the soul.
Truth belies the beauty
of a love, cursed by the
confine of an ill-fated name.
Oblivious to its relevance,
inauspicious in its existence.
Forsooth, that light through
yonder window that doth cascade
upon the hollow skin,
belies the anguish of a love
unbound, a love forever lost.
Author notes
My interpretation of R&J, with a throwback to Shakespeare at the end.
A contest entry
- Romeo and Juliet by my02U.
480 points, ended December 8, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Poems That Begin With The Letter 'L'. by xxRainbowDawnxx.
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Sometimes you fear that you'll never find anyone else again and will therefore never find yourself either.
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its hard to not enjoy R&J, its a classic... In this poem, I was kind of attempting to modernize it, by bleakly retelling the story, but I wanted to stay true to the source and pay homage to it... and, well, this is what I ended up with.
"an ill-fated name...a love forever lost." -
This is an interesting interpretation... so, do you like the story or not? I enjoyed the language you used, it kept the poem rooted to it's inspiration. Great take on the prompt, and good luck!
Luv,
Lovey
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I had to read this again ...takes me a few reads to get it
never good at shakespeare...lol
I give it a 10! beautiful write
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I like this alot! very very well done. R&J is one of my fav storys and i think you have portrayed it well. well done and good luck in the contest!
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