Abandoned By Hell

Scattered,
unsolved mysteries wept,
exiled from dreams

forgotten,
eyes swollen,
leaking like tar

stubborn,
the world rebels,
denying sleep

nightmares
recede beneath reality,
like peeking toms

disbelief
disarms hells sting,
hope fills voids

tuned out,
monotone madness slumbers,
leaving reality widowed

Author notes

Prompt: http://brightii.deviantart.com/art/The-Silence-She-Whispers-103736546 (30-60 words)

A contest entry

Quickie Anyone?? by Sweet Impatience. 750 points, ended November 18, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

Please tell me what you think

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penman
December 11, 2008
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Excellent
Such a gifted write. So very well expressed. congratulations on the bronze.
Noir mariposa...x
November 19, 2008

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I agree with most of the others there, I adored the ending. This is an awesome write ^^
A well deserved bronze
Congrats
Claire x
Sweet Impatience
November 18, 2008

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ooh I love this poem a lot. the imagery throughout this piece is extremely dark and excellent. my favorite part of all is the last stanza.. fantastic job..

good luck
kat
kiwigirljacks
November 18, 2008

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Like stanza is wicked! Excellent write for the pic all round.
Scyphon
November 18, 2008

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Wow, such powerful wording. Excellent write. Great ending as well... Just again... WOW
Best of luck to you
Kari
November 18, 2008

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The very last part of this piece totally made me shiver...this was really deep!
Best of luck in the contest
KayJay
November 18, 2008

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Excellent imagery... "monotone madness slumbers,
leaving reality widowed"- wonderful phrasing that brings the image to life... Well done and best of luck...
Ken