In the midst of life’s beautiful garden,
Where the sweet little flowers grow,
There are weeds among the blossoms,
That the gardener did not sow.
Foliage that seems at first glance,
Like it is normal and must belong.
In harmony with the little flowers,
To help them grow and become strong.
Yet underneath and at the roots,
Another story must be told.
Abuse of the sweet little flowers,
That damages their precious souls.
The weeds choke the very roots,
That is the essence for their life.
Tainting their sweet, sweet fragrance,
Slicing through their soul like a knife.
Without help they will die and wither,
Because of the abuse they have endured.
They are looking for some kind of hero,
So their safety can be secured.
Growing tall inside the garden,
A savior rises to battle the weeds.
In a world of hurting little flowers,
A Sunflower is just what they need.
Author notes
Pumpkin Pie is my favorite. This is for Sunflower House, a child abuse prevention center I volunteer with. www.sunflowerhouse.org
A contest entry
- Field of Dying Dreams by Starz of Heaven.
625 points, ended November 19, 2008, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me hope, tell me about Abuse. by Cyanide Dreams.
1500 points, ended January 25, 36 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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No words to describe this! I am just amazed and makes my eyes well up, Jesus to weed out the weeds...awesome vision, worthy of the trophy. Blessings.
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I loved this poem. Its amazing how you took this and made it into such a cute metaphor. Every child that gets abuse deserves a hero. and this is just so cute... good job. and good luck.
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Thank you,and thank you for the honor of a trophy it is much appreciated.
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Excellent poem with a single metaphor extended throughout! This flows well with great rhyme and good rhythm, too. Great message. I will check out this site, also.
Have a great Thanksgiving. I hope you have much to be grateful for. God Bless you, your family, and your ministry!
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Wow
This is so awesome. I really like this take on the prompt and can see why it won the Gold. Abused has been so rampant for so many years now. Thanks for sharing this, Michele
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Ahhh, a saviour rises, this is so precious...congrats on the Goldlol
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The order of things...
Seems that the older one gets, the more one realizes just how screwed up this world is...and it's made up of individuals. One at a time. I thought the poem was a very nice read. Good Job!
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Amazing
This was just beautiful. I am literally in love with this poem. You have written it for such an amazing cause and it is filled with such beauty and emotion.
"The weeds choke the very roots,
That is the essence for their life.
Tainting their sweet, sweet fragrance,
Slicing through their soul like a knife."
This stanza is very powerful to me. Thank you for sharing this wonderful write with us. Congratulations on the gold, you more than deserved it!
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I can appreciate ...
your caring poem and there's is nothing to compare with a garden of hybrid flowers but I also like the wild flowers that are planted by the head gardener, God! They are not weeds at all but can produce a field of flowers that speak of his glory to each season.
I do realize that your poem was a metaphor for the work that you do as well! And I surely can say, with that in mind, that as a young girl I encounterd many of those weeds along my path to adulthood. It made me a stronger rose!
sincerely, joy
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Thank you, yes the wild flowers are so beautiful too, they grow free and tall and I love to see them on the roadside and in fields. They are not weeds even tho many think they are but they haven't grown to appreciate them yet. Thank you for commenting.
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Thanks for your comment, but this is really lovely. Well worthy of the gold. Good luck with Sunflower House.
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Thank you, I love working with them. I always know that what I do is needed.
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This is beyond amazing I love this poem very nicely penned full of emotion weaved through beauty. Thank you very much for sharing and entering and also following my rules good luck.
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Thank you for the gold, it was a great contest.
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intrusion of bad seed takes hold and appears to belong,
intrusion of bad thoughts in humanity takes hold and appears to belong,
Christ conscious a gift of the Holy Sprit, within all humanity to remove the bad thoughts and grow abundantly, how precious is this gift given by our Savior.
A SUNFLOWER IS JUST WHAT THEY NEED
SO VERY VERY BEAUTIFUL.
QUITE A PLEASURE
God bless you my friend...
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Thank you, came from my heart!
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Moving
Mark, your caring heart has penned a cry for the abused children as well tonight..Midst the weeds, it is wonderful how you have mentioned Jesus so appropriately as the Sunflower! You are the one to be writing about them as you work with them daily..A bouquet for you brother as you so aptly have written in tribute of their precious lives!
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Thanks Rose, In these times the need for help is even greater
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Excellent
Wow you did a fabulous job on this poem. Oh it just broke my heart. It is filled with so much wisdom it is remarkable, really just perfect and I could relate on a personal level to your whole poem here. The imagery and rhyme was just flawless then it also flowed so very well. You did a great job on that picture. Best wishes in the contest my friend.
Many Blessings
Much Love
Kelle Marie 
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Thank you, the picture helped me bring out a poem I have been working on in my head and could just not get it write till I saw it.
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