I crave his touch,
I miss him so much.
His scent on the sheet
makes me feel incomplete.
I’m filled with love
mixed with memories of
days and nights filled with passion
and liquid orgasms.
It’s been a dry spell;
I’m living in hell
since he went away…
it’s been a whole day!
Author notes
Option 3.
Prompt: Picture
Picture Credit: http://frozenstarro.deviantart.com/art/Body-crumbles-103796180
30 – 60 words (53 used 
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A contest entry
- Quickie Anyone?? by Sweet Impatience.
750 points, ended November 18, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Comments Always Welcome
Comments
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At first, I thought that this was going to be one of those dramatic pieces, and I was expecting you to go on and on about how much she missed him. Then bam! You smack me with that last line out of the blue, and I burst out laughing. (I should have expected it. The title, and it being you. I guess I'm out of it tonight...) Well done! The rhyming is great!
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'Liquid orgasms'...
what a realistic phrase!
Gal
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LOL a whole day.. well heck, it's a famine right there!! Nice take
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catchy title.
your style of writing and humor mixed right in..I love it..actually I do really love your take on the prompt. it wasn't what I was expecting which is a good thing. out of the box type thinking. on a serious note here.. the imagery through out this piece is excellent and vivid.
good luck
kat
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Wow, what a terrible position
for people to find themselves in.
Great work with this picture
and good luck to you with it here!
Jeremy0826 -
Fitting title!
Emotions run deep with this! Great imagery...and nice strong ending that sums everything up! Good luck to you as well & thanks for the read -
Excellent
What a terrific take on the image. Filled with your usual skillful talent. Best of luck in the contest.
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Aw geeze, wow that makes me miss him as well!
Awesome job..I feel like I'm really feeling what you are feeling in this piece!
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Correction - "she's feeling"... I really don't miss him at all
Ken
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Wow, this is very well done... gives me the feeling of desire for ones caress. Best of luck to you
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Great take on the prompt. I enjoyed the flow, and the satirical passion in this complete read. A wonderful beginning and an equally surprising climax. A most enjoyable read, and best wishes in the comp
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Awww awesome take on that picture
I saw the title and went... what?! But gotta say I love it ^^
Best of luck to you too in the contest
Claire x
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