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Schizophrenia, My Only Friend

 

 

 

 

Lost in this world

I seek your help

you're always there for me

giving me advice

 

family thinks I'm insane

that don't know what lurks

excruciating pain felt

every breath I take

 

Schizophrenia

my only friend

I beg of you

with all of my heart 

 

please take me away

so far from here 

 

 

 

 

...tonight

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

30-60 Words
Prompt: http://brightii.deviantart.com/art/The-Silence-She-Whispers-103736546

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  • Nicada silver member
    November 26, 2008

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    This is a touching take on the prompt, and such a vivid view into the life of someone who struggles with schizophrenia or aother mental ilness. Clear imagery here. Thanks so much for sharing this poem. Blessings, Patty


  • alco
    November 26, 2008

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    Hi Jeremy,
    I can understand what you're saying here. It is hard having mental illness, and having those in our families who think we are "crazy". I am schizoaffective, among others. I can't say I know your pain, I don't think anyone can truly know what another person feels, or on what level they are feeling it. But I can tell you I'm sure we share similar difficulties in some areas of our lives.
    BTW-nice to meet you.
    ~Monica


    • Jeremy0826 silver member
      November 26, 2008
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      Hello there Monica!
      It's a pleasure to meet you too!
      Thank you very much for taking the time to read
      and comment on this write. I appreciate it and
      look forward to reading your work as well. Take
      care and Happy Thanksgiving to you and yours!


      Jeremy


  • Ellis gold member
    November 24, 2008

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    I don't believe in imagination
    unless I know it is real
    like thinking of a situation
    that I've been in a great deal

    A dream is not what's seen awake
    What comes may not be good
    but even if it's hard to take
    No fear comes from what's understood


  • kareneisenlord gold member
    November 23, 2008
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    The picture is amazing!

    The words describe it so well - 'my only friend.' Very intense!


  • tawk gold member
    November 22, 2008

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    Schizophrenia is very disabling, although I do not suffer from this I do have friends that do. Your words go so well with the picture such vivid imagery and emotion within your amazing poem. Thanks for sharing. Have a blessed day. hugs Theresa


  • Arizona Sunset
    November 21, 2008

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    Excellent take on the prompt, gives the reader much to ponder and think about. Schizophrenia although bad for the afflicted, your poem highlights this sad and debilitating mental problem...best to you in the contest brother ... s


  • Three Doves
    November 19, 2008
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    A well written poem worthy of the pic. Excellent Write! I too saw her pain.


  • ratkos
    November 19, 2008
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    an awesome take on the prompt! beautifully written...great portrayal!


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 19, 2008

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    i have my ups and my downs, but this poem kind of makes me think, cause people think i am a unchecked Schizophrenic, who knows they may be right, but I like it, my best stories come from the voices in my head. keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Dragonbabyx3
    November 19, 2008

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    I like ittttt! Its very nice, soft and suttle... I have felt like this so many times in my life... uh oh.. that doesnt mean I am schizo does it?


  • quack silver member
    November 19, 2008
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    this is really good


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    The mind splintering in an effort to save itself! Yes, you've captured this well!


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    I so love this poem that you've written.. I was like Yeah someone else thought the same thing that I did.. when I saw this picture.. do you know how many times that I've tried to spell Schizophrenia and still end up spelling it incorrectly... the imagery is outstanding in this one.

    good luck
    kat

    • Jeremy0826 silver member
      November 18, 2008
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      Thanks a lot sis! I am glad that you enjoyed this one.


      Jeremy0826


  • Mozaic
    November 18, 2008

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    I love...

    ...how twisted this piece is...I like where no one is there the subject turns to his vices in desperation! Good luck in the contest!


  • KayJay
    November 18, 2008

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    Has everyone gone mad? There must be something about this image that I don't see Regardless, this is a fantastic take and interpretation of the prompt... Well done and best of luck.
    Ken


  • Scyphon
    November 18, 2008

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    Awesome one my friend. Great take... and as they say, great minds think alike, lol
    It was a kool pic
    Best of luck to you my man

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