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Still My Hear, Don't Beat So Loud

Still my heart, don't beat so loud.
What a beautiful scene.
My friends, not right now,
Let me think,

Remember.
We danced.
Flames erupted, licking the sky.
Wood cracked under heat.
Sending up fire flies,
Enveloped in aromatic smoke.
We danced.
Naked arms swaying,
Drums beat with primordial sounds,
Each one of us has our own swagger.
Souls lifting to the clouded night above.
What a primal scene.
Hair clinging to our faces,
Sweat graced our lips.
We danced.
Pentagrams swayed,
Five points,
Earth, flame, air, water, life
All become one
Intertwining,
We danced,
Conjuring spirits
So, still my heart, don't beat so loud,
We have cast a spell.

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  • echo-ink
    December 30, 2008
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    You did a fantastic job writing for the prompt picture for your Gold.
    Thanks for entering.


  • HereComesTheSun
    December 7, 2008

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    great interpretation of this quote and congrats on gold. overall the piece is a breathtaking amazing piece i loved the rhythm you installed and how well it fit your words, great job


  • Sokarjo
    December 2, 2008

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    Congratulations on the gold! This is a very vivid piece, full of imagery and meaning. Well done. Blessed be!

    S


  • LittleMoon silver member
    December 2, 2008

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    Congratulations on your Gold. This is a lovely write and it has all the right "feeling" to it that matches the picture perfectly. Very well done. Sheila


  • Passionate Phoenix
    November 19, 2008

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    wow this piece is fabulous. I love the idea of casting spells or enchantment and you have made it sound as real as possible - and you've done a wonderful job. your use of description is wonderful and fits in well.

    well done and good luck xx

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