Enchanted Mother of the sea,
I come not to you for answers,
but only to be heard by thee
for how does one know
the true vision of the heart
which in thy breast
doth live, as thine in me?
from this day forward
i will walk
on his mortal land
in my hand
I hold thine key
to this
beautiful
aquatic kindom,
which has been
my home, my life,
my freedom
to give it back means
that I am ready
not to leave it,
but to be the wife
of the prince
in my dreams
my only sorrow
Is that I will not
again see thee
for thou art
my beloved
Mother
and I shall miss thee
every day
of my mortal life
for you have
touched me,
taught me,
loved me
Author notes
The Inspiration for this poem is credited to the photo used in kiwigirljacks' last contest PP#25. It was too late for me to enter the contest when I finished it, so I am just submitting it as one of my new. I hope that you will take a moment to look at the picture that inspired this poem because I feel it will touch you toohttp://allpoetry.com/contest/2427509... thank you for taking the time to visit. You are always welcome here.
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Your first stanza is such a grand thought. I think we find the answers we seek within ourselves in a quiet place where contemplation becomes possible, such as by the water. I've always loved the sea and have written about it extensively. Kind of unusual, as I didn't get to visit any ocean until 1988. 
Still, there is something quite soothing about being on the shore, watching the waves crash, smelling sand tasting the salt air, feeling the enormity and humility of something so incredible. Well done, Poet. 
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Thank you, I do appreciate your time and I can't thank you enough for your thoughts and inspiration. I too love being by the water and we live within 2 hrs of the gulf. I will look up your poems about the sea and yes the salty air and vast open water, I love the ocean and being there is so seductive. Thank you Night Hope.
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Wow...this is a mature write. I like how "not" "for answers" the narrator starts the dialogue with Mother. Has the "bird takes flight from the nest" feel to it. Very well done.
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Steve
Thank you so much for your wonderful comments and for taking the time to read this piece. It is so appreciated.
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Classical
These lines are classical, romantic and beautifully penned. They stand alone and are not in need of anything other than themselves.
for how does one know
the true vision of the heart
which in thy breast
doth live, as thine in me
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classical
thank you so very very much for your thoughtful comments
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Yes, a great response to the picture, going deeper and darker than one might expect from a "pretty picture." The formal English seems appropriate for the mythological quality of the story line. I'm not sure why you used "you" rather than "thee" or "thou" in the first and last stanzas; was it for a better flow or rhythm? Nevertheless, wonderfully done. I enjoyed reading this very much.
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Thank you so very much for your thoughtful comment. You raised some good questions and i will look at it again. Your thoughtfulness is always welcome here
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NIcely woven story. Fits the picture well.
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful comment.
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Amazing write, peachy
....a very creative take on the prompt(I thought the girl was in a water torture chamber).
Vito
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Vitodulce
Thank You
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No hablo Espanisho
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very very..
sweet, I'm sorry you missed the contest to place this in my friend, but hey at least kiwi..read and liked it..
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Swan
Thank you my friend for your support. You are always welcome here with your thoughtfulness
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inspirational
This is so beautiful! I can agree, the sea can teach a lot about life, but first we have to listen to what it tells us, before asking to be heard... and you gave a good example of that...
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thank you so very much for taking the time to read and comment. Your thoughtfulness is always welcome here
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What an absolutely lovely poem! The feeling of her leaving her Mother the Sea to walk on land to be with a loved one. The sense of sadness at leaving, and gratitude for what has been given.. is so beautifully done. I wish this had made the contest!!
Thank you for showing me this write inspired by the contest picture we had.
Love this!
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Kiwigirljacks
I cant thank you enough for your heart felt comment. I know by your words that you heard me through my poetry. I am honored by your thoughts. Thank you so very much.
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