Stepping out of darkness
to three quarters light
I am male, she claims
It's all the world sees
unaware of
her
flamboyancy
supple wrist,
thighs and hips
simple movements;
stirring waters,
piercing shame
with fun in
ebb
nurture in flow
Ample-
swaying her dress
fear melts to
tremble;
tremble
to
butterfly kiss
I am male, she insists
frosting dappled floor
contouring her movement
femininity in abyss
with one act of courage
a curl of ankle;
her hair
sun dances
flitting
shoulders of despair
forms come and go
accepting them pass
She emerges into
one third light
revealing
woman
Author notes
best - it is a poem about transgender issues
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forms come and go
accepting them pass
She emerges into
one third light
revealing
woman
This is a wonderful piece. I am sure that the transgendered community here at AP will like this. Thanks for the share. -
Ambivalance Refined
I could see the metamorphisis in this write and the background is well suited. The poetic devices employed are beautiful as is the style and voice of the poet. The stepping out of darkness to three quarters light entrance and the emerging into one third light ending....threw me a little, perhaps I am slightly ignorant or not exactly grasping the full expression there. But overall, the poem is very vivid and expressing a clear emotional acceptance and convergence into a somewhat undefined gender. I'm not sure that femininity is so easily defined? But then I can see the outward tangibility described giving a clear picture nonetheless.
I would have to say you did a beautiful job with the poem overall and I had a compassionate response to the inward struggle portrayed. It must be very a very difficult situation to find oneself in.
Thanks for entering it and I was honored to read your work.
Bravo!
Justified Inc.
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thank you :)
I really appreciate you had a compassionate response
maybe you are right about femininity not being so easily defined,
i got in touch some aspects. I don't believe that i could ever write a poem that would be definitive of femininity.
the three quarters light and at the end one third has many meanings for me.
I am more rigid when trying to be male.
one third, for me implies a patience and a curvature in that, which is integral to my needs.
Thank you for an interested and wonderful response,
Best wishes,
Isabella
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"I am male, she claims
It's all the world sees
I was reading that, and thinking that the 'she' was claiming the male was the other person with her -
I didn't realise until I hit up the author notes that this was a poem about transgender, but now that you mention it, everything falls into place -
Wonderful writing, and such an interesting topic to write on; unusual too!
Thanks for entering
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I agree with livedog on this.
I'm not sure how accurately I interpreted this, but I suppose leaving it up to the reader to interpret is what poetry is all about.
It was well written, and unique.
Thanks for this entry, and good luck in the contest. -
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thank you
thank you for your comment, i appreciate it and am glad you saw it as unique
and thanks for the silver trophy,
warm wishes,
Isabella
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this is amazing!
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:)
thank you
warm wishes,
Isabella -
thank you :)
thank you,
I'm really glad you like it,
It means a lot to me.
warm wishes,
Isabella
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8.6/10
I like where you went with this. It was definitely an uplifting and a great read, but for future recommendations in my next rounds contest, maybe make your lines longer and simply make the poem longer as well. I see where you went with this piece, and I saw the prompt you had, and with your potential that you seem to have, you could really go somewhere with this. I like it a lot. Welcome to the finalists ♥ -
swaying her dress
fear melts to
tremble;
tremble
to
butterfly kiss
I am male, she insists
frosting dappled floor
contouring her movement
femininity in abyss
Nice. Im not sure what the male part means, unless this is an allusion towards the fact that males of anything are always more brillaint colored, more striking. . .see? even in real life, we cannot get away from it
There's no more I can really say, except I loved these lines.
You've done a wonderful interpreatation on this prompt, and I wish you all the best,
Love,
jin
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Thank you
Thanks for your comment
This poem might make more sense to you, knowing that it's about transgender feelings,
Best wishes,
Isabella
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Hi Isabella
I am impressed with your deep understanding of the sensuality of being woman. I love that kind of rhythmic sensuality. In reading your poem several times I could feel the sense of movement and freedom in being a woman - wonderful insight and knowingness.
Warm wishes,
Liveddog. -
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thank you
thank you for your wonderful comment,
I really appreciate it,
warm wishes,
Isabella
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