Sat at the keys with a whisky and a gun, the hidden grief of the boy who cries.
Easier to keep everything out than let the darkness in,
faithless, souless, hes empty inside.
Hiding behind a veil of cheer, he boards the windows of his mind,
easier to lie to those he loves than tell them hes dead inside.
The hidden grief of the boy who cries, the secret depresssion of the man who lies.
whatever
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excellent!
It reminds me of the poem I wrote not long ago the title is the same thou mine is "The girl who cries" I really like the ending.
---The hidden grief of the boy who cries, the secret depresssion of the man who lies.
You have a great talent indeed.
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Wow, this is a great poem and paints a wonderful picture of a man dealing with a boy's grief still. The imagery and emotion is wonderful!
Great work!
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I know I've already told you how much I loved this poem, I thought I'd leave a comment as well I keep coming back and reading this piece! I really liked it, I find it really intriguing, sad, thought provoking. Everytime I read it I seem to get something else out of it. It's so full of emotion. I really think that this is probably the best poem I've ever read by you
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Emm...
That was deep, emotional, and relatable.
I understood it, and almost cried.
My eyes, are teary now.
The imagery is disturbing, but very nice.
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Hmm...
First i got a picture of a grown man at a piano playing the saddest song i've ever heard. I loved it.
It somewhat relates to something everyone must go through.
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That's very deep and emotional. I'm a bit confused as what you mean by "keys", though. A keyboard? Piano keys?
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good point!
The reference to keys is not really needed any more - the second line used to be - "trying to write the symphony of fools contentment" but took it out - therefore the keys were that of a piano but now its really just there to ground the piece -
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Ah, I see. That would make sense. =]
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"Short but Sweet" - This poem!
I can relate to this so much...it really shook me...good job dude!
your imagery is fantastic with...pretty much this whole slab
"Hiding behind a veil of cheer, he boards the windows of his mind,
easier to lie to those he loves than tell them hes dead inside."
really good stuff...if i could give you more than 3 i would
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Wow, this is really good. I'm glad you've started to write again.
I liked the flow of the imagery; 'he boards the windows of his mind' struck me as being effective.
Keep writing.
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wow...this is amazing...i find myself hiding sometimes...
Hiding behind a veil of cheer, he boards the windows of his mind,
easier to lie to those he loves than tell them hes dead inside.
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Ha, yeah hiding depression is not fun whatsoever. I have become a master at the skill...'happy' around everyone and become this horrid monster by myself. It is not enjoyable...
This poem is amazing! I relate to it so much...it actually broke me into tears. I haven't cried for awhile..and thank you!
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wow....
an amazing piece. dark and beautifully written. i know the feeling of hiding my depression. it isn't healthy, but i still do it. you have such talent, thank you so much for sharing your work.
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