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True, I Talk of Dreams

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True, I talk of dreams,
Which are the children of an idle brain,
Begot of nothing but vain fantasy.
Romeo and Juliet, 1. 4

 

 

Enter ROMEO and JULIET

ROMEO
If this domain with thy unworried look
Whence you, hold this but gentle win against,
My lips, have brushed two blushing sprites in angst
Have I too smooth assurance from thine hook.
JULIET
Desire, you do so wrong to hand me much,
Allure to which good manners have shown this,
For thou to hand it to you, though your touch,
Hath firmly placed it noteably amidst.
ROMEO
These planters have continued found the same!
JULIET
Aye, sincere your eyes lurch into mine.
ROMEO
O fear, for thou have hands connecting few:
Against the less equipped of my despair.
JULIET
'twardly, have your eyes between these prayers' sake.
ROMEO
Then move not while my prayer's effect I take.
[kisses her briefly.]
Lest token them sublimal be them urged, content,
though untouched, we both should equal vent.
JULIET
A promise then to persevere contempt.
ROMEO
From nothing more than promises shall spake
Give thy guilty plea.
[kisses her again]
JULIET
You mistook.
[ROMEO laughs and kisses her again.]
ROMEO
Peace, that amples lay as two combined, with words the lesser said,
when eyes are closed.
[JULIET opens her eyes to seduce more interest from ROMEO]
ROMEO
Forever and to smother!
JULIET
[compliments with eye.]
To smother well, but not thou kinship type,
who've smothered love with any kind of terse.
Wise it may be said, but least like virtuous.
to tell you, I have far more days with gripe.
 Us having closed them ranks, discord to source,
Denied by fault, when Capulet's revolt. 
[ROMEO speaks directly to the AUDIENCE.]
ROMEO
Is she a Capulet?
For thy sake of interest, doth thou investment cease?

Author notes

I have re-written Act 1. Scene V: from the first line, onwards.
If I profane with my unworthiest hand
This holy shrine, the gentle fine is this
My lips, two blushing Pilgrims, hands do touch
And palm to palm is holy palmers kiss.

1. I've chosen to delete the parts of the nurse and Benvolio.
2. Chose to make this a more favourable position for the lovers
3. 'Prilgrims', are less conspicuous, therefore this word is erased.
4. In the play there's more than just the two lovers. Here, this remains.
5. Once again, at the end, audience participation to the, 'investment'.

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  • X-Princess-Naomi-X
    December 11, 2008
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    its wonderful i loved it sooooo much may i be juliet?


  • my02U
    November 18, 2008

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    This is beautiful work, as is the original. I liked the word choice, but will have to check the original to make sure this is not too close! Beautiful poem, and I love the image!

    Luv,
    lovey