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Take My Hand

I see you standing there
And wish that I were, too
For if my words don't change your mind
I will jump for you

You don't want to do this
You're up there shedding tears
Don't forget the memories-
Our good ones through the years

No matter what they tell you
Just know it isn't true
This is not the way to go
And I feel you know it, too

I know you're in such pain
But just give life a chance
Come on down and let's go home
That's it, take my hand

Author notes

another one of my favorite songs =P "Don't Jump" by Tokio Hotel

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  • StarEyes
    January 6

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    Never heard the song, but OMG! This is amazing! What a wonderful read!

    Best of luck in this contest!


    • rayraystingray23
      January 7
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      Thanks so much!
      I think its a really pretty song- you should look it up! haha =)

      thanks again =)

      ~Rachel =D


  • cbsbecm88
    November 25, 2008

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    Title-9 good title! don't jump...take my hand!

    Flow-9 good flow especially nice in some places

    Rules-10 you followed the rules good job!

    Creativity-9 good spin on the original song

    Song-9 here's another one out of the few that actually seemed to base their poem off of the song they picked!

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    good job and good luck! thanks!!!!

    ps-hey i know this is quite metaphorical but AHEM! read your own words!


  • Dreamer42morrow
    November 23, 2008

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    OMG Rachel this is so ahmazing!!! I've never heard the song, but the poem was awesome =D claps!!

    ~Mariah!~


    • rayraystingray23
      November 23, 2008
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      hehe thanks =) it's a really pretty but very sad song...you should look it up!
      thanks again =D

      ~Chel

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