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split the pole...

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I dont think she had any idea
of how she had moved through time
from ancient sands before Nubia when
the Nile was still young, and verdant Sahara
brought beneath Sun a tribute of myriad life.

Her broad magnificent face became images
graven upon symbols of wealth... and power
flowed from the heart of Africa in humanity
words, rhythm and art... mahogony trunks of tomorrows
like seeds spread upon a wider world.

I dont think she had any idea...

how the rise and fall of dynasty became
the flower of an age, and how the age
came to sudden crossing with an era of ruthless greed

suddenly seen as empty, lands across green seas
gold and burning need to feed
dark blood to fishes and adorn new shores
with the want for more, more and more.

I don't think she had any idea

how her song filled still air over prisons upon rolling waters
with an eternal beauty and longing she became the bond and sinew
of freedom. But oh,... how the slave woman
became the bride of the master
and the mother of a slave child; and how
her courage grew as a tree planted beside the waters,
never to be moved
but to recreate and replenish and confound evils of the world,

I don't think she had any idea.

How the stroke of freedom came unto her prayers
and her prayers became the generations from then to now
clung to her hems of liberty, heft upon her love song of life
nourished by her soul of wisdom;

and to now in a splendid day...

I pass her on city street, and she is the 'geechee' woman
voodoo and drum the South and  memories of hurt
the north and renascent freedom, pull of anonymous throngs
and she tells me... "don't split the pole"
and walks backward to undo the curse
for she is still my mother and my sweet aunt
and she loves me before she knows my name.

I don't think she has any idea...how much I love her.

 

 

 

 

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  • arnal
    June 16
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    A very pleasant poem, some history to understand, what more can I say,enjoyed


  • truembrace
    February 20

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    there is just something about that last stanza of yours with her definition that I found most stunning in this poem. the poem overall is simply great, but that part of it had me "wow'd".

    As strong as ever with this one PK.

    Kim

  • ecrivain01
    February 16

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    This is exquisite ...

    and really there's no need to say anything else. Of course your cheering section has basically said everything there is to say anyway.

    This really is a "tour de force".

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    December 10, 2008

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    I love the opening stanza, I feel like I am going to be taken on a journey.

    I think line one is stanza two just has one too many adjectives about her face.

    This truly is a piece of the world, I love the way you use places and things tangible to that place as images.

    The 'how her song stanza' is good, great really but I think some of the lines need to be broken up just a bit. I also think the part that begins with 'slave woman' is where your strength is in that particular stanza.

    The final line is a kicker, really, I wasn't expecting that at all. Love thestanza before that though, the idea of who shehas become - really well done.


  • poet of justice
    November 24, 2008

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    bful peom :)

    thank you for your truth and campassion in this poem , it seems like it was real what you were talking about , and great words and passion alaos thank you bful person


  • Peteskid gold member
    November 24, 2008
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  • RikkiRae silver member
    November 24, 2008

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    When I saw "the Nile was still young, and verdant Sahara" my first thought was that I had found a fellow traveller, but I fear I was mistaken.
    What you have written, was interesting but I am sorry to say that I do not consider it a poem. For me, it is aprose. Extremely well written and a very interesting read. Each paragraph was written as a single sentence with no rhyme or rythem.
    I am sorry if I have offended you, it is not my intention.

    • mervie gold member
      2 days ago
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      to RikkiRae

      Ok, Rikki -- will you accept prosery?

      • RikkiRae silver member
        1 day ago
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        Yes, I can see no reason why I cannot accept the word Prosery for we are often inventing new words to describe something.
        I do hope that you were not offended by my comment as that was not my intention.

        Regards

        Rikki

    • Peteskid gold member
      November 24, 2008
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      Thank you for reading and your comment, and of course there is no offense...prose is not a bad thing...some of the great words of human kind have been accused of being prose ...thank you for your thoughts...PK


  • poetryality silver member
    November 20, 2008

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    My dad used to call me a "geechee" because I love rice, still do, could eat it right out of the carton from the Chinese Resturant.

    Your poem surpasses the ages. It is true, "she loves you", and it is good that you love her back. The sentiments and images written here are stunning. A very engaging poem my friend. Simply beautiful!




    Much Love ♥

    Renee


  • lovesky
    November 19, 2008

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    I travelled on a journey through this poem. One of deep emotion and love , your words moved me .A brilliant piece of work , well written .
    Great Write!


  • feetus
    November 19, 2008

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    This was a very rewarding read with deep meaning & well-worded structure. I enjoyed the developing line that paid off at the finish. Thanks for sharing this.


  • Mari Goes gold member
    November 18, 2008
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    Not only the visual but the depth of the feelings this poem emanates, makes of it a very touching and special poetry.
    You write about the roots and the present leaves with lots of emotion here as if you were in the deserts of Africa at the same moment you walk on the city streets.
    Simply wonderful

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