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Babysitter go Away

My babysitter smells
like she lives in a well
and she is not fun
she makes the sun hide
and the clouds cry
she goes outside
and the wind screams
then blows her far away from me

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  • Scyphon
    November 23, 2008

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    lol, that was funny and cute. You're lucky to have such caring wind to take that smelly sitter away


  • PinkPony
    November 21, 2008

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    Love your imagination here with great images that seem like a Dr. Seuss book.

  • Topnotchsy
    November 19, 2008

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    Nice poem here. Hope this is not about a real babysitter, but I love the idea of the wind getting angry and blowing her away.


  • aeolia
    November 19, 2008

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    Well, hopefully this isn't based on a real babysitter you've had, because she sounds horrible and smelly and just not what a babysitter should be. Very cute poem, Genna!

  • Sky Prince Ireland gold member
    November 19, 2008

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    Hmmm. She doesn't sound like a very nice babysitter sweetheart. She doesn't deserve to be around kids if she's going to be hard or complicated. A nice vent of your feelings. Thanks for sharing. Daddy


  • Lady Altheia
    November 19, 2008

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    IAwww, my poor Genna, I love to babysit you. You and your mommy should come visit me if you can. We would have fun together.
    love you lots,
    your AP mommy


  • Noir mariposa...x gold member
    November 19, 2008

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    aww what a horrible sitter!!
    Pssh, I'd come babysit you any time, and I'm pretty sure I don't smell
    Cute write

    claire x


  • my.stars.dont.shine
    November 18, 2008

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    Haha. This is funn. =) I hope your babysitter isn't like this! I'd have to come tie her up and take over! =p Good luck in the contest! =) <33


  • Lady Australis silver member
    November 18, 2008
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    cute babay
    love you

  • Going Forever
    November 18, 2008

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    I don't like my baby-sitter either. she is exactly like that..lol
    This is a great poem Genna.

    Magikal Fairy Girl


  • Hope Angel silver member
    November 18, 2008

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    Haha I like this girly. Now I know what to do when the babysitter comes around. *giggl* I love you and good luck in the contest


  • daviscth silver member
    November 18, 2008

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    This is a wonderful imagery filled poem for the contest sweetheart. I hope she really isn't quite this bad though. Good luck in the contest.

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    Haha I like this hrmmm next time spray your babysitter with the Lysol that is behind the door that might help some lol


  • Melodies
    November 18, 2008

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    ACK!!! Does your babysitter smell musty? I am smiling at your poem because of your wish that the wind would blow her away. The crying clouds is a fab image. A very smart poem about the sun hiding and how that brings on a storm. WOW... a fine take on the baby sitter.


  • aboomer silver member
    November 18, 2008

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    oh my - a smelly babysitter! LOLOLOL
    and she lives in a well? doesn't make enough money for an apartment?
    I'm laughing at the sun hiding and the clouds crying - she must be terrible!...lol
    And I really love the image of the wind blowing her away - she needs an umbrella like Mary Poppins, or a dog named 'toto' (like in the 'wizard of oz')....heehee
    so cute
    best wishes in your contest.

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