There you sat,
fingers spotted with plaster and underglaze
and all at once
my life became a tempest
I closed up my umbrella
and I put away my raincoat, and I stood
arms wide, face to that electric north wind
And found beauty
In the coolness of the rain on my skin.
Please tell me what you think
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WOW!
this is beautiful. and walking or just staning in the rain brings such an amazing feeling. i your last line... awesome! keep penning
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I like this very much. Welcome back to the writing world. The only thing I muight consider is loosing the 'so' from the beginning of the third stanza, putting a comma at the end of that line then loosing the 'and' and both 'I's in the following line. Lovely write.
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Took your advice!
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Do you like it better?
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Not certain yet! I'm going to let it sit that way for a bit and decide in a day or two.
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