They say love is undescribable feeling
elated when your inlove revealing
nice to think that im inlove
it paints a smile in my face shove
everytime when i think of you
and all i do is dream about you
but time has change this all
i felt that your no longer entral
your feelings has suddenly all change
you dont say you love me and its strange
i kept asking what was gone wrong
why it seems so perfect and strong
I cried in silence
linguering question abience
what am i ganna do with this
im missing your hugs and kisses
but it choked me to death
thinking that your turning your back away from me
I hate to think that your gone
but what else could i have done
i dont want to beg you to come back
id rather be alone in the track
and hating myself in the bend
than kept on loving you in the end
A contest entry
- Quote by Maybe Anastasia.
400 points, ended December 10, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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ok I love the point to this. and there are some lines that are fantastic. (what am i ganna do with this
im missing your hugs and kisses
the thought of you it choked me to death
turning your back makes me out of breath) but the way you wrote it would lend itself well to some ppunctuation. And in other places the flow seems a little rough and the words out of place. This may have been done on purpose but as a reader I didn't like it personally. but Overall I really liked your write. Thanks for the entry
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