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Forbidden Love

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Forbidden Love

 

If I were to alter my heartbeat to the world’s view,

I’d lose my inspiration like I lost loving you.

If I sat and played a tune to my own soul’s sorrow,

I’d leave all fresh memories and not see tomorrow.

 

Emotions overflow that I can’t seem to control,

but if I should die a thousand deaths, no-one would know.

As I close emerald eyes, I see clearly deep despair,

I wish I had died yesterday, now love’s an affair.

 

Ramblings of a dried out ink pen, once weaving so well,

I tried to stand on solid ground, but still I tripped and fell.

As my lips moved closer to the one I saw as true,

she whispered ever gently, please don’t say I love you.

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Thanks for reading me, and your time spent on my pages. Peace.

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  • Blue Rew silver member
    March 13

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    experience speaks fluid through this verse...
    We may push aside that which has hurt before
    while others hold onto that past pain ever more
    tight. And when they meet, the sorrow overwhelms. As always, your dark pen touches me.

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  • Sharon Corr gold member
    February 26

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    ~Thank you Timothy, for sharing such a divine song of lost love~

    Now I lay my heart down to pray
    Hey we both have to hide our love away
    Why should we both lose?
    Where O’where is our dancing shoes
    Overflowing with emotions on this write
    Your words echoing in sorrowful insight
    Oh the ending is sad indeed
    As I watch my knight on his white horse
    Ride so far away into eyes of yesterday.

    Baby if I could whisper these words to RAM
    I would say, why the “Forbidden Love” of yesterday.
    Comforting to know you can feel the same way.
    ~All my love, Sharon~


  • Angelflower
    February 22

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    this was really beautiful in a sad way.. You sigh power images into the readers mind.. such a poetic masterpiece of a sorrow filled soul.... thank you very much for sharing.. I loved the ending

    Angel


  • kjack
    January 22

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    Wow, brother. This is splendid. I'm so glad I checked this one out for sure. It kinda related to my thoughts lately. This was beautifully done, and still painful to feel these words. The rhythm is perfect. It hurt my heart to read something so sad though. Beautiful still though.

    becca
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  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 25, 2008

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    sad, and i do mean that in every sense of the world, cold is the heart that come read this and not be effect and reflect, keep it flowing


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    November 24, 2008

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    This is such a sad piece of poetry Bro, I really think you should refrain from capitalizing every line, try putting a comma on every 1st and 3rd lines of each stanza and a full stop on every 2nd and 4th lines in every stanza that way you capitalize every other line after the full stop, and it makes the poem flow better. You rhyme like a proper Pro here, apart from the two words "well" and "fairytale" that doesn't rhyme together too well apart from that this is great work Bro, Hope you dont mind the tiny critique.
    ~kitty~ love ya~


  • mysticstorm gold member
    November 21, 2008

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    This is so lovely and soft, yet so sad and painful...I truly love this write but am saddened also by your words...why so much pain, my friend.
    You are to beautiful a soul for this...
    Sending you love and light,


  • Jalalbad gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    sigh so sad poeticweaver, your pen is indeed painful here- never the less still beautiful and poeticweaver style


  • Lonely
    November 20, 2008

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    I do not have to tell you again that Im your fan, and you are a wonderful poet. Cause I say that a lot and you must be getting sick of listening to it. lol. This poem is not different, its just another masterpiece.. worded so beautifuly. when the feeling is true. Nothing really matters.

    Love ya
    Lonely


  • Introvert2006
    November 20, 2008

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    Lots Of Pain.

    I really like how you worded these two lines.

    Emotions overflow that I can’t seem to control
    But if I should die a thousand deaths, no-one would know

    So many parts moved me deeply, excellent work as always Tim, thanks for sharing.

    Introvert2006


  • Three Doves
    November 19, 2008

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    Still weaving my brother and friend, glad to see you again. Your heart never fails to touch another heart. Peace be with you. Another Excellent Write! No Surprise!
    Noah

  • Still Gonna Shine
    November 19, 2008
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    Very nice. You didn't force the rhyme, the rhythm is good, and it flows well.


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    November 19, 2008

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    Excellent

    A very fine write, indeed. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us.

  • Angelshadow
    November 19, 2008
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    Amazing.
    Almost one of the best poems I've read.

    Cheers.


  • poeticpieces
    November 19, 2008

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    Powerful Emotions.

    You're one great man, and in my book, you understand how to captivate the reader to feel your inner sorrow. I enjoyed each line that pours out your angelic heart and loving soul. You're my hero, much love to you from your son, Timothy aka poeticpieces.


  • HopelessScribbles gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    wOw tim this was sad, but i see where your mind wondered, beautifully penned, thank you for sharing as I do enjoy your poetry..
    Linda


  • Stingersinger53 gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    Sadly beautiful, now these kinds of poems are the reasons I stay where I am when it comes to the heart. Great write, I don't know if it is your heart speaking or your pen, but no matter what I'll always love you!

    Hugs!
    Cayla


  • Wandika gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    Some real truth here

    I know of what you speak. It is as if we both did have the same rough time. Sad but too true, we both write better for the experience.

    Jim


  • MarriedToTheDevil
    November 18, 2008

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    This is really really good :]
    Loads of the time, rhyme gets cliched but this doesn't

    I think my favourite part is the second to last couplet and the last stanza is really strong :]
    It just, you know, captures the feeling of forbidden love really well which can never be a bad thing

    High fives!
    x


  • Amera gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    The emotion that you put into your poetry is so inspiring. The sadness in this write is poetic genious.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • EeyoreUK
    November 18, 2008

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    this is such a moving write. I can feel the emotions flowing and its clear your heart is on your sleeve when your painful pen is in hand


  • RikkiRae silver member
    November 18, 2008

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    Do you dare to love?? Can you love and keep your sanity?? I felt the destruction of a soul in that last line.
    I felt it appeared a little awkward in how each stanza was written, yet it was precisely because of that, that each stanza poured out its pain. Such pain does not flow freely and thus it should not be written smoothly.
    Well written, a truly deep and sad piece of poetry.


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    awwww your painful pen cuts deep hon as all your poetry yu reached in and grab our emotions i enjoyed this i saw your heart clearly


  • DesolatELifE
    November 18, 2008
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    Sad. Very sad ending.


  • Nature Song silver member
    November 18, 2008

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    Forever a whisper you would hear indeed if forbidden loved ever whispered in your ear....Please don't love me! Wow. A very impressive write my friend. ~Sie


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    November 18, 2008

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    Very deep and sad words here.
    A lot of emotion in this write and
    something that no one should ever
    have to feel in a relationship. Well
    done with this write bro!




    Jeremy0826


  • smiley
    November 18, 2008

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    Intense

    this stanza really spoke to me:

    Emotions overflow that I can’t seem to control

    But if I should die a thousand deaths, no-one would know

    As I close emerald eyes, I see clearly deep despair

    I wish I had died yesterday, now love’s an affair

    I have been down this path, only once but once is enough.



    Yvonne

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