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fire within; which road?

we look at each other with knowing eyes; towards her!
at what we can both see
knowing that this is how we will never be
throwing evil looks her way with pure jealousy

we joke about our eating like it is a game board
but deep down we both know where it leads too
we do not care, we do not argue
how could we tell each other off

knowing that we are as bad as each other
we would be hypocrites
the path is open
do we want to follow

In the midst of the clouded smoke
the fire that is burning furiously below
what road are we going to follow
the long road to recovery; or the dead end and choke

are we bad for each other; if we do not swallow
we keep ourselves on the straight
but are we just playing with forbidden bait
I wonder how long it'll be before one slips

what will this do to the other
will we remain strong and carry on
or shall we keep fighting to be empty
be in control is what we want

laugh it off and pretend it's funny
when we both know that we are being a dummy
where will this road lead
and what is meant to be

Somedays I hold my Celtic chain
looking for hope from somewhere within
but what comes....nothing
I remain to cling onto my beliefs so I do not go insane

But at other times
I couldn't care less
the more weight I lose
is for the best

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This is thought of today after wondering whether I'll ever recover from ED's

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  • "laugh it off and pretend it's funny
    when we both know that we are being a dummy
    where will this road lead
    and what is meant to be

    Somedays I hold my Celtic chain
    looking for hope from somewhere within
    but what comes....nothing
    I remain to cling onto my beliefs so I do not go insane

    But at other times
    I couldn't care less
    the more weight I lose
    is for the best"


    OH HOW I sympathize I am majorly overweight and the very last stanza you wrote describes me to a T I am sure you were talking about a different kind of ED but eating everything that isn't nailed down is a type of ED too. Thank you for sharing this it gave me hope.


  • Knight70 silver member
    May 15
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    I have faith you will recover.

    Certainly, you know all too well that eating disorders are a "constant battle," but I do have faith that recovery will happen, Kaylee. It's very courageous to write about personal battles, so I commend you for that.

    Don
    O.K. back to sleep for me, since I've got the flu!


  • LunaAmara
    December 12, 2008

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    You will recover! It will be difficult and will take a lot time. But you will. You have to have hope that you will recover, and that will help you along.
    I really love this, it touched my heart. I have a friend who went through an ED and we finally got her to recover and that is why I have hope for you.
    If you ever need anything, please feel free to message me.


  • Walking Oxymoron gold member
    November 18, 2008
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    Wow. Who the hel do you compete with? I know damn wel i.m not stupid enough to joke wit you bout. That would make me very silly indeed!

    come on,you know better. If you want to recover, you wil. If you don't, you won't!

    as for the poem... Its a good one. I'm just a little angry that you don't have more faith in yourself!


    • DinkyDiver gold member
      November 21, 2008
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      faith?? what is that lol. No I am not competeing you.... xx


  • aboomer silver member
    November 18, 2008

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    Nice job with your wording and emotion!
    I think you did well depicting life's struggles.
    best wishes in the contest.


    • DinkyDiver gold member
      November 21, 2008
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      thankyou for taking time to comment, I really appreciate it :-) x


  • csmmoms2
    November 18, 2008

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    Stunning

    Roads merge and change like the wind. We decide what's right for for us-decide which lane to drive in. -c

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    I think you did a good job here life is a struggle that has many roads thank you for taking the time to enter my contest best wishes always be well.


  • McRae by nature
    November 18, 2008

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    how could we tell each other off

    knowing that we are as bad as each other
    we would be hypocrites

    Powerful understanding. This is such a struggle and I think you did a fantastic job writing it down.

    Carrie

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