Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read Contests Groups Learn Forums Store Help
 

The Gift

She always said to never make promises.
"Promises can be shattered and heartache takes its place.
Please, lets never promise anything for my own selfish sake."

Silence came over the lovers,
as the last words were spoken.
Nothing else was said,
as that promise became unbroken.

Soon Christmas had come

and the lovers gathered together to open their presents.
When there was none left to open, and all seemed complete,
the girl reaches behind her; to give her love one last treat.

Smiling at the girl, the boy began to open the unknown.
A simple frame he held, with only words to be shown.
The girl nestles behind him to hold him dear,
as he read out loud what had been her fear.

I Promise to love you
as long as time can be
and ever after if you will allow me.

I Promise you honesty
even if it strains your heart.
To keep secrets from you could tear us apart.

And I promise you friendship,
for friendship there should be.
Allow me to cry on your shoulder,
and I will let you lean on me.

Then together we may hold hands
and walk through the gardens of bliss,
creating more blossoming Promises
with each loving kiss.

 

 

Author notes

this was written for my husband when we first met, didnt have any money to get him a present, so i thought id give him a present no money could buy. this exact poem framed and wrapped is what i gave him.... there was tears in his eyes. 2001

A contest entry

what do you think.

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 10 of 10

  • dragonscales
    December 20, 2008
    Edit | Reply

    P.S.

    im glad you entered the contest and good luck

  • dragonscales
    December 20, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    it is beautiful. i love the way you wrote this poem. the verses that are written on the frame sounds like they deserve to be on a walmart christmas card or valentines or something. it sounded so perfectly fitting. the words just flowed together.


  • Jesann gold member
    December 19, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    This is very beautiful.
    Heartwarming.
    A wonderful gift .


    • Ziola
      December 20, 2008
      Edit | Reply
      ty so much for your lovely comment


  • Danna Hobart
    December 11, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    Thanks for entering.


  • Violinstrings silver member
    December 10, 2008

    Edit | Reply

    this is original

    this approach to idea of gift givining
    disappointment state in a beautiful way
    like a song or story
    this deserves to win and i am in same contest


  • faithwhisperer silver member
    December 8, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    This is great! It reminds me of one year, when I gave my friends poems and a matchbox car based on their personalities. I think this is a wonderful, creative gift, and I'm sure meant so much more coming from the heart. Very nicely done, and thanks for your entry!

    faith


  • daviscth silver member
    November 25, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    What a beautiful tribute to your husband and a perfect Christmas memory. Thank you for sharing with us.


  • thejollytinker
    November 19, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Sounds to me like we have a romantic hearted young lady in this here scrum! Oh, to be loved as you described- what a great write, thank you!


  • Maxboy gold member
    November 18, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    This is absolutely beautiful, beautiful, beautiful, I wish I could have said this.

    Wonderful...Best wishes in the contest

1 - 10 of 10