Leaves graces her walk
as she brisks through the woods
Her smile so dear to life
It welcomes her warmly
So strong through the changes
she has faced
She has one won her life back
She has came through many journeys
and will overcome many more
Her life has just begun
Many lifetimes she's faced
Her heart is broken
It won't hurt her this time
Her change has come
from the best
She's learned to be brave
She looks out from the woods
And smiles
At last I'm Here
Author notes
I believe in the unknown
A contest entry
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Comments
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Impressive
I would take a deeper look with your proofreading were I behind your pen. Thanks for playing along.
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Lovely image of one who lost and overcome it all.
Nicely done.
best wishes in the contest
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Great,
A very intriguing idea, however, with a few minor adjustments in spelling and grammar you may better bring your meaning through. You have time to adjust it and I really hope you do, it could be outstanding.
Poetry is work, but after some hard labour the beauty that comes through amazes most, frightens some, but inspires all.
Best of luck,
♥.
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i think this is something, i like the end and how this kind of reads like the short version of a story keep it flowing and good luck in the contests
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There's a few typos, but overall good job. Thanks for entering and good luck!
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Though you speak of journey and arrival it leaves me feeling lost.
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Outstanding
I enjoyed reading this a lot. I liked how you told a story and created a glimpse into her life with details like her broken heart. The imagery is strong throughout. Best of luck in the contest.
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I love this, I feel like I can relate. There were a few tiny errors that caught at me for a sec, but this is really good. My only suggestion is the background...kinda hard to read. Great job though, and thanks for entering!
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I like this piece, intriging and mysterious. good use of imagery and description, and layout.
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this is very secretive. no one knows who she is or what she is looking for. is nice
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This is very mysterious. Love the whole "unknown" factor. This was beautifully written and very good imagery as well. I felt like I was walking with her.
Carrie
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