Such disdain and loneliness
I feel in solitude this day
I want to laugh
to find the strength
to see the great a amusement.
I fake a laugh
and force a smile
and then I start to realize
Maybe I expected too much
from people's kind hearted notions.
A god forsaken planet
with love forsaken people
I know you'd love to challenge this
so try to prove me wrong.
If there's a god and there is love
then what god do we pray to?
According to these preachers
and according to these people
god will just condemn us all
and love will not be motiveless.
I'm so disappointed
I thought we'd be worth so much more
I guess I died and went to hell
when living in this wasted life.
I feel bad for those that care
I feel bad for those that try
they're among a precious few
and they get trampled by deceit.
I walk down a lonely road
the path I take is emptiness
accomplishments are meaningless
and decadence is obvious.
I thought I had it bad before
I thought I'd nearly reached my end
but when I start to take a seat
the chair moves out from under me.
So what now do you think of me?
And are you disappointed?
I will have you know,
that I feel the same toward you.
This is all I have to say
these words will be meaningless
for no one will understand
just what I'm getting at.
Author notes
Well I don't know what I felt when I was writing this. Let's call it, counterfeit inspiration.
It lacks emotion, it's very solemn, it's boring, and it means noting. So... I accomplished my goal.
Share with me your interpretations.
Comments
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I'm not sure about the second last stanza...
"So what now do you toink of me?
And are you disappointed?
I will have you know,
that I feel the same toward you."
So is this to say that you are disapointed in the friends that care about you? I dont like this poem... and I'm sorry about being so strightforward in that thought, but I don't. This sounds to be, and wreaks to me of desperation, sadness and a strong sense of giving up, and your better then that. You have no idea how much life you have infront of you... and that life IS worth caring and trying... and if I'm just doomed to be condemned by my God for that, I know for a fact I won't be alone.
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Well, as you say to me on so many occasions, there's no need to apologize. I will however clear up some confusion.
As far as the god lines are concerned, I poked fun at all of those that speak hypocritically of their god's love and care. Yet, when they are challenged, they're above the laws. Justified in judging others, and denying the fact that they play god.
As for the disappointment questions, those are directed toward anyone who is disappointed in my recent anger release. I'm up to here with things. So to anyone who looks down on me for my proclamation of hatred, or judges me by any standard, they're wasting their time.
If you truly want to understand certain meanings to this rant. The stanza about feeling bad for those that care particularly. I ultimately feel shameful for those that try to care, being as there are so many with selfish intentions.
Have I given up? Well, I guess that depends on what you mean.
I always enjoy a critical review, and I fixed the spelling mistake.
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not that bad actually I loved reading it, it's worth something to me
take care *rose -
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I suppose that's why I continue to post. Perhaps someone can find meaning in the words I speak.
That's always been my ultimate goal as a poet.
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