raw purity in another old form
delicate, frozen impossible dreams
falling slowly from dull, grey skies
a pillow to seek but never for rest
snowflakes will lie to all who see
a duvet to chill a cold winter's day
Author notes
prompt: winter
6 lines
carole21
written because the beauty of snow can be so deceiving
A contest entry
- Hope(ful) Snowy Nights by SilentMoonlight.
1500 points, ended December 11, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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a duvet that chills - that's a good switch on the old wintery blanket.
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I like how though this was a short write you still choked it with descriptions and images. These words cascaded down the page and wrap the reader in simple thoughts that trail behind each snowflake.
This had a different twist on it that I know most poems will have in this contest. I like how you chose to stand out.
Thanks for entering!!
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