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Justified Murder

Stressed out,
bout to pull my hair out,
done with this,
done with that,
bad mood brings me into your arms,
and you erase it all with one touch,
your heart pounds in my ear,
i'd rather be anywhere,
because what you're doing to me,
is worse than anything,
running away from being scared,
but you just won't stop,
my heart is in your hands finally,
please don't let it drop,
you pull out a knife,
and stab it straight through,
because my fear is making you,
my dreams become reality,
and my fear becomes a wrath,
i'm scared to fall in love with you,
i'm scared we won't last,
so here i go,
for the team,
for my very life,
i'm putting it all on the line,
just to be your wife.
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maybe.

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  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    November 19, 2008
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    what a powerful write!
    good luck in the contest


  • PaulieWantACracker
    November 19, 2008

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    wow kind of leads up to a diff point than where you think it is going. i like it tho. hope you win


  • Zenda-Lokki silver member
    November 19, 2008

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    Different

    Love how you mixed such fearful desperation with such powerful feelings of love and the uncertainty it brings x
    Great write x Thank you so much for the entry and good luck x


  • McRae by nature
    November 18, 2008

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    I love the last word, the indecision in this piece really adds to its frustrated tone. loved it.

    Carrie