Here is the part
(through great rhythm and prose)
Where I tell the world of my many woes. Where I describe to them how blind you were!
(how could you not notice me?)
How you saw my wretched plainness as evidence of me being lesser
(I am no great beauty)
I might stomp my feet, and shed a tear or two
(you heartbreaker, you)
But no, I suppose that wouldn’t do
(especially since it is not true)
Would you stop smiling at me like some Cheshire cat?
(you great big louse)
I know you did nothing wrong and that I’ve been a brat
(cart me off to the madhouse)
Fine! I admit it! I’ve been blind!
(How could I not notice you?)
Your roguish charm and dashing good looks paramount all of mankind!
(you smile because you know it’s true)
Shut up, leave me in my misery
(I’d understand if you did not want me)
Go on, away with you! Don’t you have some place to be?
(run. you’re free)
But if I could trouble you, good sir, to take me in your arms
(consider this a goodbye)
I implore you: kiss me, wow me with your charms
(now pardon me, while I go and die)
Mister, I must be honest. I do not wish for you to leave
(I’m addicted to you)
This longing in my spirit only you can relieve
(Come fly with me, do not bid me adieu)
I was wrong, you were right. No need to rub it in anymore.
(this is unreal)
Now blind me with your love. You, who I greatly adore
(just kiss me you incompetent heel.)
Author notes
Maybe this poem only makes sense to me, but It is about a girl who is angry at a guy for not noticing her. But she can't lie to herself and she knows that she was not the only guilty party, that she also never noticed the guy.
p.s. I'm the girl. 
my husband's the guy (true story)
A contest entry
- Not sure a title! But come anyway! by Lost in a Dreamstar.
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the title?
I can see tbis was a highly personal piece... I liked where the ending took us.. it seems that the title, rather than "Blind" which implies maybe you ended up with something you couldn't see.. maybe you should call it "vision" for you saw what no one else saw. Nicely done, I enjoyed it - Kevin
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Wow, an amazing poem nicely written! well done and good luck
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I love this poem. Really beautiful!
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I understood it! Great but what option? I got rid of option 1...
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whoops! i meant option two.... =)
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